poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Dovina (4121-4140) and replies

Comments byDovina, 4121–4140 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on A Choice by Dovina 12 Sep 2004, 3:01 PM
And why, kind Prince, might that be?
on School 61 by unnesessary 12 Sep 2004, 12:18 PM
I should vote 1 in retaliation, butI rather like this.
on Deep Sleep by Enchantres 12 Sep 2004, 9:35 AM
What a perfect way to die. Nice.
replying on Daddy by LintyWeenis 12 Sep 2004, 9:11 AM
This is Poemranker, not Sportsranker.
on Daddy by LintyWeenis 12 Sep 2004, 9:10 AM
I'm with you on the pain, the cold.
Why drive-way, not driveway?
If it's a rewrite, why "throat.When?"
replying on A Choice by Dovina 12 Sep 2004, 9:03 AM
It’s the old and true maxim, “Show, don’t tell” that I can’t get a grip on.
replying on A Choice by Dovina 12 Sep 2004, 9:02 AM
As a poem, that last line doesn’t do much for it. As a toast maybe.
replying on A Choice by Dovina 12 Sep 2004, 9:02 AM
Thanks.
replying on A Poem by BigB 11 Sep 2004, 10:16 AM
Then you agree.
replying on A Poem by BigB 11 Sep 2004, 10:16 AM
You can change it if you want.
replying on Soft and Pure by Dovina 10 Sep 2004, 12:38 PM
Thanks, Ed.
on corrupting me by skaskowski 10 Sep 2004, 11:57 AM
Good rant.
replying on A Poem by BigB 10 Sep 2004, 11:49 AM
And did you vote zero on my poem because of my comment on yours?
replying on Soft and Pure by Dovina 10 Sep 2004, 9:45 AM
Thanks Dan. I’m not sure how you mean to squeeze those first 2 1/2 lines into "A belief, a certainty?" Maybe those lines aren’t needed.
replying on Dare by LintyWeenis 9 Sep 2004, 3:02 PM
Saying that it's open to interpretation is saying the obvious, whether you explain or not. To simply say you're not going to explain is to send me away wondering, unless you think it's so obvious I should know your meaning. Seems to me it needs a lot of help in grammar and clarity.
replying on A Poem by BigB 9 Sep 2004, 12:54 PM
Going back to my original comment, I could argue that it was only that – a quickly phrased feedback to BigD on how the poem struck me. When you mentioned the “excellence” of my distinction, facetiously no doubt, I looked again and realized I really had said two things in reaction to the poem, not just one, and quipped, “I'm glad you see the distinction.” Notice the two statements I made:

“Maybe a more descriptive title might have eased my misunderstanding,” and

“Maybe a more descriptive title might have eased my failure to know what you mean.”

Admittedly, the word “Maybe” is not needed, so let’s just look at:

“A more descriptive title might have eased my misunderstanding,” and

“A more descriptive title might have eased my failure to know what you mean.”

When I said, “my misunderstanding” I was saying that I had an understanding, but it was wrong. But how could I have known it was wrong? Because I judged my original understanding of the poem to be wrong. I know that because I remember, but you could have known it too, just from the way I phrased it, and maybe you did. When I added, “my failure to know what you mean,” it was a hands-thrown-in-the-air giving up on any more attempts to understand the poem. One reaction came before the other, neither very oafish in retrospect, and linked by the word “or.” So my comment, revised, is: “A more descriptive title might have eased my misunderstanding, then my failure to know what you mean.” Of course, I could dress it up with adjectives and allusions to the poet’s parentage.
replying on A Poem by BigB 8 Sep 2004, 5:53 PM
No. Not in evaluating a comment which we all know the menaning of, and which, like most comments, yours of course excepted, are rattled off without the precision of polished writing. Dear God, have I made myself clear?
replying on A Poem by BigB 8 Sep 2004, 1:40 PM
How indistinctively indistinct we are and engrosed with trivia.
on Curtains by mr smith 8 Sep 2004, 10:42 AM
Old age, minds fail, memories and desires last. Not bad.
replying on Who'd suspect? by thepinkbunnyofdoom 8 Sep 2004, 10:21 AM
That's the ultimate in dimness, a colossal blob of balogne blubber! I'm learning. Ain't it great.