poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Dovina (4281-4300) and replies

Comments byDovina, 4281–4300 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on Certain circles by INTRANSIT 7 Aug 2004, 11:10 AM
A brief epoch and a little didactic. Good
"who's" "weathered face"
replying on Missing Grand Miss. by timtonio 6 Aug 2004, 1:20 PM
Why not put your reply under the comment you're replying to, like this. I fail to see a mature person saying "All of our days we vie to be one of the elitist few."
on The Glow of the Sun by QuirkyWonder 6 Aug 2004, 10:55 AM
Ah, to be young again, or old again, still lying on the beach. Not bad.
replying on Solid Understanding by Dovina 6 Aug 2004, 10:49 AM
The second verse seems to have everyone vexed. Rewrite in progress.
replying on Solid Understanding by Dovina 6 Aug 2004, 10:48 AM
1) “simplest” yes, thanks.
3) Could change to “none of it sounds true,”
4) The fear is mine, not his, and I should make that clear. Thanks.
replying on Solid Understanding by Dovina 6 Aug 2004, 10:46 AM
I hate the ending when a solid piece of intuition or emotional understanding so sputters my words that he turns away. But I do need to say it more understandably. Thanks.
on A Beautiful Pain by timtonio 5 Aug 2004, 4:49 PM
A good thought. "a future foretold" tends to spoil the intrigue that's otherwise there.
replying on Peace that Passes Understanding by Dovina 5 Aug 2004, 10:46 AM
Thanks. To the instincts of traveler and poet.
on Brats by D. $ Fontera 4 Aug 2004, 5:34 PM
We're all brats, aren't we?
on Mike Pike!! by DR Limerick 4 Aug 2004, 5:30 PM
Now mike is a collossal tripe.
on Marina by INTRANSIT 4 Aug 2004, 5:25 PM
Sailboat waiting to sail or sailing though foggy. Like it.

Try "Peace that Passes Understanding" again and see if my explanation makes sense. I'd like to know.

Very little action on Poemranker today. I mean by users who don't call themselves "not Dovina."
on Wha wha guitar by wnot Dovinaw 3 Aug 2004, 12:25 PM
The votes and comments here tell us something, don't they?
replying on I Love You Mildred Rogers No Matter What by cat 3 Aug 2004, 11:06 AM
Yeah, I only saw the surface of it, if that's what you meant. Too vague for me.
on Mr. Stryker, Do You Really Want Some Kind of War? by cat 3 Aug 2004, 11:03 AM
An actual observation, no doubt. But it lacks and more than observation, nothing really to provoke thoutht.

"there were only two bus. . . "
on My two cents by hobojo 3 Aug 2004, 10:54 AM
This is good, but what are Cylindrical Errs? The last verse seems superfluous.
on May I? by cedand1 3 Aug 2004, 10:49 AM
I suppose if I did not relate to this in my own experience I would pass it off as another ramble by another crazy poet. But since I do, it's enlightening.
on nice day by New Life Drug 3 Aug 2004, 10:42 AM
Quite good, really, except for the last line, which because I'm accused of being a prude, I will say doesn't fit here.
on He Will Be Loved by eyrbare 3 Aug 2004, 10:38 AM
I like this quite a bit. Try a line break after "Sharon." Falling for roses and stabbed with barbs is quite nice, reqlly, and recognized.
on Harvester of Sorrow by frdup717 3 Aug 2004, 10:30 AM
-=Dark_Angel=- with or without P.I. embodied.
on Innocence by QuirkyWonder 3 Aug 2004, 10:28 AM
"waiting to be wished upon."
Cute.