Comments byDovina, 641–660 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

Another criticism of Christian hypocricy, and fairly well stated. Ironically, one of Jesus' major complaints with the "church" of his day was hypocricy.
on Fare Price (Final Version) by Wakeboarder20 31 Oct 2006, 10:54 AM

Fare price, as in a ticket to Heaven, is meant, I presume, as criticism of the church for wanting money for such passage. It's acommon theme, and not too well presented here. I'd rather see a juxteposition of "fare" and "fair."
on 311006 txt to russia by daniella 31 Oct 2006, 10:50 AM
Yes, I have been spoken to by such voices. A less cryptic title might dispell criticism.
on Still by half.italian 31 Oct 2006, 10:45 AM
I relate to scarce memories, ones that feel like they responded to fate. I don't believe in fate, but I know the feeling. I don't like the idea of "correct tastes." The Eiffel tower has an appealing shape, but it may not be a "correct taste" to everyone; if fact it is not.
replying on Blue, Black & White by oneglove 29 Oct 2006, 3:14 PM
Lots of corners
Lots of rooms
Lots of strumming
Lots of tunes
replying on The Pit’s Bottom by Dovina 29 Oct 2006, 6:40 AM
So stick around and you shall hear more, or less.
replying on The world's shortest poem by ALChemy 29 Oct 2006, 6:37 AM
How about "creatively spelled"?
on Blue, Black & White by oneglove 27 Oct 2006, 2:31 PM
Reads like a song. Call it a lyric and give it a tune.
on Consider this by MacFrantic 27 Oct 2006, 2:26 PM
Don’t “think twice about God or the Devil. We are fragments in a sea of ineffable words.”

I feel that way often. Sometimes I think it’s impossible to talk about God or the Devil without resorting to analogy or metaphor. Some say that if anthropomorphic language is all we have in these matters it becomes added evidence for their non-existence. I disagree but see their point.

Some good thoughts here, but could be more poetic, and at least called “prose poem.”
replying on The Pit’s Bottom by Dovina 27 Oct 2006, 2:14 PM
Oh, I don’t know. Say, for example, that a theologian’s work is to prove the existence of God, not banter about with unbelievers.
replying on The Pit’s Bottom by Dovina 27 Oct 2006, 2:13 PM
Well, Mr. Everlasting Godstopper, that’s a hoot of a name. What I am trying to convey in the part before “But:” is what a lot of theology tries to convey: a wonderful, loving God, an evil sinful world, and a means of reconciling the two. But it always fails when they find cancer cells among God’s creations. The second part says to forget all that and simply accept the universe as is—the atheist message. I call it The Pit’s Bottom because until a theist like me accepts the creation at its worst and attributes the bottom of the pit to God, she’s done for.
on The Pit’s Bottom by Dovina 26 Oct 2006, 1:02 PM
This piece of doggerel is in response to “Crappy” by Dr. Nick, DND, Doctor of Non-Divinity, Pastor of the Michigan Church of Atheism.
on # 2 by Lifeboatman 24 Oct 2006, 6:09 PM
I don’t pretened to follow this; I suspect that you and your lover are the only ones who do. I do like some of the lines:

“Must we to Time's fall fall?”

“Yet go gently, never in haste. Deny not what you desire to taste. Then shall glee befall us.”

“daffodils” “bouquets”
replying on Prologue by Dovina 24 Oct 2006, 11:11 AM
It is intro to my next great work. Stay tuned.
replying on Your Eyes by Dovina 24 Oct 2006, 11:03 AM
Actually, “gate” may not be what I’m searching for. It’s more subtle than that; maybe just a fencing nail left loose at a cedar post, allowing a strand of barbed wire to be lowered enough to gain entrance. Thanks for the comment.
on Epilogue by MacFrantic 23 Oct 2006, 5:38 PM
It could be the end of a great collective work, of which mine is the Prologue, and the middle is all of Poemranker.
on Canada by PodPoet 23 Oct 2006, 5:35 PM
You may not be from Canada, but I've been to most of these places, and it sounds like you have too. What I miss is some application, something beyond rhyme and reninisce. The last line especially needs something more specific than "all" and "awe."
I wish you would enter discussion on whether these Jesus poems are satire or if you really like this stuff. If you mean it, then you've progressed about an inch backward from the Crusades.
replying on Prologue by Dovina 23 Oct 2006, 4:13 PM
And there I have another reason for saying you are more fun to argue with than zodiac.
replying on Prologue by Dovina 23 Oct 2006, 2:49 PM
I thought it was only slightly more clever than droning on about writer’s block.