on some deleted poem
9 Jun 2007, 12:18 AM
you're quite the character, huh?
on A Flower for Monet by Shuushin
9 Jun 2007, 12:15 AM
Very, very nice. This tipped off my tongue beautifully, and the language/wording is excellent. It's classy in the beautiful sense.
on Jesus by Sing4Jesus!
9 Jun 2007, 12:19 AM
I like your poetry. Why are you listed so lowly?
on turd cutter by Count Flatula
9 Jun 2007, 1:52 AM
you know, the content isn't why I'm giving this a 0, because I actually find feminism provoking bits and pieces amusing. I'm giving this a 0 because you could've done something better. the meter's out and the rhyme happens once. put some time into it.
on Humpty Dumpty's Regrettable Fate by MacFrantic
7 Jun 2007, 1:17 AM
Hahaha... very entertaining much. Where did you pull this prom?
on some deleted poem
9 Jun 2007, 12:34 AM
indecent descent? I quite like it for the smile I put on my face, but I'm not quite sure if it's poetry.. ;) here's a bonus 3 for that smile.
on Persnickety by malpaso
9 Jun 2007, 12:42 AM
I think this could be expanded on, lines changes and lengthened, others added. Fatten up the story if you will - the story's clear but the details aren't.
=> Jess
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on Shuushin the multi-personality total cunt by mr cunt
6 Jun 2007, 11:05 PM
Haha, I could give you points for laughs. But I'm not going to. (and usually I hate poetry Nazis).
on Johnny Neurotic by Enkidu
7 Jun 2007, 1:15 AM
I like this one a little better. Twas worth the read in thought alone. So many media references... I had to think it back twice to remember some of it, lol.
on May Monday Explanation by MacFrantic
9 Jun 2007, 12:03 AM
I like the first four lines, but after that it's like the meter/syllables/what-ever-poetry-nuts-ca
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on The Red Chain by MacFrantic
7 Jun 2007, 12:57 AM
I don't understand the first line, and I'm not one for poetry that's so rephrased and rearanged it's fragmented, so this doesn't rate all that highly with me.
on some deleted poem
7 Jun 2007, 2:47 AM
Not as good as the last I read, how-ever still mind-twisting decent.
Anything that provokes thought is worth a read.
Anything that provokes thought is worth a read.
on 0 by MacFrantic
7 Jun 2007, 12:59 AM
Great minds think alike, eh?
I like.
Very, very much. So very clever, so very few words. I'm not going to check if it's bonified haiku or not (as form and strucure aren't a biggie in my books), but it's great.
Oh god, oh snap,
=> Jess
I like.
Very, very much. So very clever, so very few words. I'm not going to check if it's bonified haiku or not (as form and strucure aren't a biggie in my books), but it's great.
Oh god, oh snap,
=> Jess
on One O Five in the A.M. by Enkidu
7 Jun 2007, 1:13 AM
What the random?
You're not drunk or spaced, because the typing's coherent... but maybe it's transcipt of the post previously poorly written.
Either way, a little more spastic fantastic than poetry.
=> Jess
You're not drunk or spaced, because the typing's coherent... but maybe it's transcipt of the post previously poorly written.
Either way, a little more spastic fantastic than poetry.
=> Jess
on The North Wind by Ranger
6 Jun 2007, 5:15 AM
There are all this tricky rhyme schemes in the world, but I reckon it's nice to see it taken back to basics once in a while. One on one, obvious yet not obtrusive. Lyrics or not.
I'd've written Said in the fifth line with a '. 'Said, short for I said. But I can be the queen of ideomaticity and colloquealist english. So I'd caution you against my advice.
But yes, I'd say if we polled it here and now missed 'I love you's would be the chief regret.
=> Jess
I'd've written Said in the fifth line with a '. 'Said, short for I said. But I can be the queen of ideomaticity and colloquealist english. So I'd caution you against my advice.
But yes, I'd say if we polled it here and now missed 'I love you's would be the chief regret.
=> Jess
on Sit tight, sweetheart by JMakStak
6 Jun 2007, 2:42 AM
people blinded by the pr and politics fronting a war? losing loved ones in choosing ignorance?
I'm interested to know what this is about, because I like the poem itself, language etcetera. but I like the metaphore/simile/etc itself a whole lot more.
I'm interested to know what this is about, because I like the poem itself, language etcetera. but I like the metaphore/simile/etc itself a whole lot more.
on Interest and Association by MacFrantic
6 Jun 2007, 2:39 AM
S'almost a swinging twenties style applied to an eighties era. I like how you desribe things - the adjectives and metaphores - and the twisted structure behind the words.
It's the kind of poem you expect to be read by a slick voice through thick lips. Slant rhyme, and all that jazz.
=> Jess
It's the kind of poem you expect to be read by a slick voice through thick lips. Slant rhyme, and all that jazz.
=> Jess
on The Corner Tavern by jessicazee
6 Jun 2007, 2:45 AM
Hm, I like this and I don't.
I like how you desribe things, in themselves, but I don't like the repetition. Kitch language (which I like), but then again the repetition of words like and and for and how kind of drown it out.
But I mean, we're talking personal tastes here. You know how it's best read, not me lol.
I like how you desribe things, in themselves, but I don't like the repetition. Kitch language (which I like), but then again the repetition of words like and and for and how kind of drown it out.
But I mean, we're talking personal tastes here. You know how it's best read, not me lol.
on some deleted poem
6 Jun 2007, 3:00 AM
The syllables seem off for a haiku, but to be honest I wouldn't have a clue what exactly constitutes any form of poetry.
Seems a little ambiguous to me, although I guess there's meaning enough. What hinders you only makes you stronger, makes you look for alternate roots, stops you taking the path most taken, cliche, cliche etcetera.
=> Jess
Seems a little ambiguous to me, although I guess there's meaning enough. What hinders you only makes you stronger, makes you look for alternate roots, stops you taking the path most taken, cliche, cliche etcetera.
=> Jess