on behind the banister by FreeFormFixation
6 Jun 2007, 1:48 AM
Is calico a cat or a dog?
Albeit you've got hopeed instead of hopped, at least, but I like your style. I guess I like a bit of skittish madness in the form of freeform, lol.
Come to think of it, I've never been a fan of form (because I can't master it myself ;))
=> Jess
Albeit you've got hopeed instead of hopped, at least, but I like your style. I guess I like a bit of skittish madness in the form of freeform, lol.
Come to think of it, I've never been a fan of form (because I can't master it myself ;))
=> Jess
on save a class now by FreeFormFixation
6 Jun 2007, 1:51 AM
I might have to favouritise you so I know where to go when I can come back (whence I'm not cramming for exams).
I like it. It's cheeky. On a more formal note I think it detereorated from "And roger was weeping," but I wouldn't change anything if it'll mean taking away from the general feel.
Haha, awesome.
=> Jess
I like it. It's cheeky. On a more formal note I think it detereorated from "And roger was weeping," but I wouldn't change anything if it'll mean taking away from the general feel.
Haha, awesome.
=> Jess
on some deleted poem
3 Jun 2007, 5:13 AM
Life as conveyed through the illusion of satyric toilet humour.
Why yes, I think I like it
Why yes, I think I like it
on Let's Grovel For Jesus And Fight The Naughty Satan! by Sing4Jesus!
3 Jun 2007, 5:15 AM
Although I can see why you'd get rated lowly, I also don't see how it's that bad as a poem. The religious nuts have to pull their heads out of their arses and realise you're supposed to rate a poem on it's merits, not your own personal beliefs.
=> Jess
=> Jess
on some deleted poem
3 Jun 2007, 5:07 AM
Mostly I'd just say you need to proofread, at least in the last paragraph/stanza.
doesn't - miserable - lives - drowning
How-ever I do like the subtle rhyme scheme, and how it's written a little like a story.
Grief might seem like it intensifies, but in time time will heal. Oh the irony, but it does make sense.
=> Jess
doesn't - miserable - lives - drowning
How-ever I do like the subtle rhyme scheme, and how it's written a little like a story.
Grief might seem like it intensifies, but in time time will heal. Oh the irony, but it does make sense.
=> Jess
on some deleted poem
3 Jun 2007, 5:11 AM
Although this isn't senryu, it's pretty alright. What does "braying" mean though? Should it be "playing"?
Also, bollocks isn't actually a form of poetry, they were saying they didn't like your poem.
=> Jess
(ps, small world, but at least before I rate your comment right now, one of my poems is directly below you on the rankings)
Also, bollocks isn't actually a form of poetry, they were saying they didn't like your poem.
=> Jess
(ps, small world, but at least before I rate your comment right now, one of my poems is directly below you on the rankings)
It so eerie in the empty sense, regret in the third person, just a hint of bitter.
I like this very much.
=> Jess