I'd go with not a good poem personally.

When I knew that my father was to pass on, I asked him to leave me his handicapped sign in his will.. for situations where you can't find a damn park! I enjoyed this Dovina. Thank you.

Oh, I've been there!

I'm glad that people have found this poem difficult to read.. that was the purpose! lol It was supposed to demonstrate a process rather than a product.

No one has actually commented on the intent of the poem. I've received many talking about the 'nature' of this poem - that it is about landscapes and one-ness with the earth. It was actually about seeking an orgasmic experience.. go figure.

This gives me a sense of your internal struggle, Chesty.

I enjoyed this one! - especially the last verse!

Knowing a little of the situation that surrounds the writing of this poem, I'm moved greatly by this. Congratulations Chesty - I hope that the person it was intended for has read it!

Thank you Nentwined... I suppose the my verbosity overflows into my poetry. I speak very much as I write - just like Regency Ladies - twittering mindlessly, repetitiously covering the same inadequate sayings endeavouring to get my point across. I appreciate all the comments I receive from others on this site.

I never said that it was fake.. it was more of a comment on the excess and cost and for what end?

Dovina.. my hubby is a train nut.. I love this! Many of the heritage railways would love a copy of this. Congratulations.. it conveys the melancholy and the hope.

your use of similes and metaphors are very poignant!

An aching refrain.. Bethy did you mean to use wisp or whispered in the fifth line? Just wondered if the use of present tense was purposeful?

A political politiked commentary on today and the presidential campaign... your word choices create an interesting fluidity to the reading.

Made me think of my teenage years and smoking through the bathroom window!

Thanks Bethy... this is just one of those poems that gave me an opportunity to express how I was feeling at the time! :)

This poem resonated for me.. I particularly enjoyed the tempo that you have conveyed with your spacing of the text as it conveys the highs and lows of life just as much as the words you have chosen do!

Thanks.. Although the "Yes, it's better than..." are actually a rhythm that I use to play a calypso beat to Amazing Grace.

Celtic.. I really enjoyed your poem as it's resonance chimed a similar chord within me. "The Fire" kindling your toes... just a breath of life, heat, flame, desire...enough to keep you from jumping over the edge.