on Lysander cried by bornagainpoet
22 Sep 2002, 6:57 PM
I like simplicity, could be modified to rhyme without losing it's intent. Good stuff!
on some deleted poem
22 Sep 2002, 7:10 PM
Sorry,didn't mean to offend. Missed
the literal. Does my rookieness show?
the literal. Does my rookieness show?
on some deleted poem
23 Sep 2002, 2:40 PM
SCHMOOOOVE! I don't think this needs anything 'cept a glass of water maybe.9
on some deleted poem
23 Sep 2002, 2:43 PM
OY! I don'tknow which way to go with this piece.Understanding fails me but, that's me not you.9
on Universal Musings by blu143
23 Sep 2002, 2:51 PM
Trim this by the first fifty-percent and let it fly.7
on untitled by ThreeFourSix
23 Sep 2002, 2:54 PM
I hate it when they don't listen! 7 his could use more and not hurt it.
on Ex In Bonds by OneFingerAnswer
22 Sep 2002, 7:04 PM
Nice rhyme! Almost fooled me with the title, or did you? Next time, turn it up!
on Faded by aperfecttool77
23 Sep 2002, 5:17 AM
Awareness is important, action is more. Good product. Go deeper!
on Here In The Heart of Amber by Lenore
23 Sep 2002, 5:24 AM
Good stuff! Tree sap color? A girls broken heart? I like poems that lend themselves to 2 way thoughts. 8
on suffer the child by edge
23 Sep 2002, 5:43 AM
Oh how I hate pain and suffering. However as a lyric this does fly pretty easily. Can't think......8
on Punishment and Punishment again by vulcan
23 Sep 2002, 5:49 AM
Sooooooo much with sooooo little.
This is artful!!!!!! 9
This is artful!!!!!! 9
on Me and She. by peach835
23 Sep 2002, 5:52 AM
Circ-ular! Love it! Fun! Poignant too.8
on some deleted poem
22 Sep 2002, 8:04 PM
I read an article in mens' health that told men what woemen expected on a date, written by a woman. I thought why would women help men take advantage of them .Then I thought to write about that but you beat me to it. And simplified it too! It doesn't get any better. 10
on When The Iron Curtain Came Down by RoseEyes
23 Sep 2002, 5:33 AM
The"walls" went up late, then came down quickly.First group seems a little off. Easy to read,liked it.7
on .:|bittersweet|:. by emman
23 Sep 2002, 5:38 AM
This has a subtle power,and 3 idea possibilities.Alittle ironing, simplification and BOOM! it's there. 8
on I Think by PawnedTidal
22 Sep 2002, 6:47 PM
Nice. Clean. Too surfacy though, you dipped well with the angel/amiss. Go deeper.
on some deleted poem
22 Sep 2002, 6:53 PM
Last line seems to be going in it's own direction,but there's a very thin connection. I think differently about people who hve given themselves to god though.WOW!
on The End OF Me by Birdman42s
22 Sep 2002, 7:00 PM
If at first you don't succeed...
Iron it out, otherwise it works.
Iron it out, otherwise it works.