Comments byINTRANSIT, 1701–1720 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:46 PM
I dun fuuuuuuuucked UP!
replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:41 PM
Clarifying: Another under same idea?
replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:34 PM
I was going for an unfaithful girlfriend that expected boy to be faithful. Then a second girl "stole"him. limited time to correct.Her name is victoria and the same femme guile she used, she lost to as well as fragrances for women. How far off?
replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:29 PM
I do seem to write better when I'm emotionally impaired?
replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:26 PM
I have all the info i want in it. I dont like my line breaks though. Not cruelty. Definitely outside of me as I'm male,points for trying?
on Papa Smurf by Bachus 20 Nov 2002, 5:58 PM
al the other smurfs left. he just needs closure. whatever that is.
on Variance of the tapeworm by horus8 20 Nov 2002, 5:56 PM
Best on the site tonight! Burn baby! BURN!
on Going to River Phoenix in my mind by horus8 20 Nov 2002, 3:09 PM
Oh great king of the wierd pile,have a coke and a smoke.
P-dummy's done. Now how about Gay-lo and Spitney beers?
on terra incognita by horus8 20 Nov 2002, 2:46 PM
LOL. _____help us all if you ever become unleashed.
on My love for another. by cleverdevice 18 Nov 2002, 3:01 PM
L-7 Replace "who" with a comma?
The change is an improvement. I would drop one "nothing". Or, last line : Did not blink. I dunno, scribble it on paper first.
on My love for another. by cleverdevice 18 Nov 2002, 7:37 AM
Yes, most excellent I think. With or without perfection.
probably me, after that little stunt "dynamic duo". Very accurate,L .
on Every single days's the same (Acrostic) by [mojo] 17 Nov 2002, 2:27 PM
Um, I didn't. Never heard of it 'till now. Thanks for the lesson.
on The Fox by cleverdevice 16 Nov 2002, 3:32 PM
Great! Amongst the many things I have to learn about here, now I gotta research foxes too? fuck. Oh well,learn sumpn new every day right?8
on Stuck in the Past... by loneshadow29 16 Nov 2002, 7:18 AM
Dude, this is true. And if you want, a great place to start progressing.
replying on Dynamic Duo by INTRANSIT 15 Nov 2002, 5:41 PM
Which pile of shit were you referring to? I give lots of 10s. They're free. Want one? Ok seriously, there's a lot of stuff I like here. I prefer to score on the upper-half as often as I can. I was more referring to your singular style of poetry.You even admitted that in another conversation somewhere. Can you iambic pentameter? If you can, I'd really like to see it. seriously. I'll concede on the trucker talk. Hair? No. I'm still going through puberty. Indiana's rather flat. Colorado,Utah,Oregon, and Washington burn up brakes and trailers quite nicely though. "run to your wife"? Nah. Just an overnight jihad before posting.(I lost). Gods Wife adors you or at least your writing. I'm sure she would do what ever she could to offer help if you actually needed it.Two suggestions: Do NOT eat from the truck stop buffet. And don't feed the bears. Not even the she bears. Why porn and tugging if you have a wife? Nevermind. I suffer from same. And one final thing about food. If I could go elsewhere with a car hauler, I would. Dennys is better. Truce bruce? Your serve. gotta go. mommys got cookies and milk waiting.
replying on Dynamic Duo by INTRANSIT 15 Nov 2002, 4:49 PM
thanks, love your corner in this round room.boom!
replying on Dynamic Duo by INTRANSIT 15 Nov 2002, 2:32 PM
I want to show an act of good faith. I'm not sure whether to drop the sword or the shield. So I will say these: Despite the "wives" line, I am sorry you are having that type of problem.
I am lucky to have a spouse that appreciates my work. I am glad that Gods Wife is (there for you). And please lose the trucker talk. That would make it seem less patronizing. I wish to volley.