on Weened by Jeremi B. Handrinos
22 Dec 2020, 4:32 PM
Some good lines, a TON of anger...
on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina
21 Dec 2020, 6:41 PM
well written, great imagery
on The Song I Miss by Miggy
21 Dec 2020, 6:44 PM
One line sticks out as not fitting the song, I think:
disliked "Yet since this rotted bad"--Liked all the rest!
disliked "Yet since this rotted bad"--Liked all the rest!
on Devilution by Jeremi B. Handrinos
22 Dec 2020, 4:33 PM
Cutesy. Villanelles are not easy...
on Beah Richards by Jeremi B. Handrinos
22 Dec 2020, 4:34 PM
Lovely
on Horror Film by Jeremi B. Handrinos
22 Dec 2020, 4:35 PM
Well written, sadness staining every line...
on Prepropositioned pudding by Jeremi B. Handrinos
22 Dec 2020, 4:35 PM
Very cute!
on A FERAL PHASE FOR THE POET by daggatolar
22 Dec 2020, 4:39 PM
The word I think is perpetuity, not perpetuality-- if trying to coin a new word, unnecessary, annoying-
some good lines-
some good lines-
on Rock of the Earth by ingwa
22 Dec 2020, 4:46 PM
Some good lines, I like the idea captured.
No comma after "Hunts gone by" I think-
some clunky lines: "experiences, good and bad"-
some very good lines: "sing to my soul of ages gone by" and "Ageless you stand, tall and proud/ Lichen grows upon your surfaces"; uneven rhyme scheme does not help (1st and 4th lines in first stanza, 3rd and 4th lines in 3rd stanza, no rhyme in last stanza.
No comma after "Hunts gone by" I think-
some clunky lines: "experiences, good and bad"-
some very good lines: "sing to my soul of ages gone by" and "Ageless you stand, tall and proud/ Lichen grows upon your surfaces"; uneven rhyme scheme does not help (1st and 4th lines in first stanza, 3rd and 4th lines in 3rd stanza, no rhyme in last stanza.
on Rock of the Earth by ingwa
22 Dec 2020, 4:46 PM
Some good lines, I like the idea captured.
No comma after "Hunts gone by" I think-
some clunky lines: "experiences, good and bad"-
some very good lines: "sing to my soul of ages gone by" and "Ageless you stand, tall and proud/ Lichen grows upon your surfaces"; uneven rhyme scheme does not help (1st and 4th lines in first stanza, 3rd and 4th lines in 3rd stanza, no rhyme in last stanza.
No comma after "Hunts gone by" I think-
some clunky lines: "experiences, good and bad"-
some very good lines: "sing to my soul of ages gone by" and "Ageless you stand, tall and proud/ Lichen grows upon your surfaces"; uneven rhyme scheme does not help (1st and 4th lines in first stanza, 3rd and 4th lines in 3rd stanza, no rhyme in last stanza.
on Ghost by Jeremi B. Handrinos
22 Dec 2020, 4:50 PM
Some beautiful lines, good ending, like how you carry the idea throughout the poem, the speaker believing the person who killed herself is so much better than he is, right to a very bitter end.....
on Days of Silence (197-392) by impert&ent
22 Dec 2020, 4:58 PM
Reads like headlines but it gripped me all the way through. Love how "Tom" lines and "Mary" are interspersed here and there. You would not think such a poem would work but I think it does! Enjoyed this! Remembered reading some of these...it engaged my thought, had some humor, did make me think! Enjoyable.
on A "sirius"makeover by The_Third_Isis
22 Dec 2020, 5:00 PM
Annoyed by so many misspellings. If they were deliberate, they were not useful. Some interesting ideas, imagery
on There was . . . by baphomet
22 Dec 2020, 5:05 PM
(stampede of cattle, not stamped of cattle)
Cannot conceive of how a wave "suede"s- swayed? What?
Oversized- one word- aftertaste, one word. Do your proofreading before submitting. " a cornucopia" not an cornucopia. "What we'll do tomorrow? Not "What will do". Too many errors detracted from enjoying the poem.
Cannot conceive of how a wave "suede"s- swayed? What?
Oversized- one word- aftertaste, one word. Do your proofreading before submitting. " a cornucopia" not an cornucopia. "What we'll do tomorrow? Not "What will do". Too many errors detracted from enjoying the poem.
on Arm 'n' headin (Mr.Mexicacco) by suprembeaner
22 Dec 2020, 5:06 PM
Annoying
on The benefit of being realistic by Jeremi B. Handrinos
22 Dec 2020, 5:07 PM
Compact, good!
on Sold by Jeremi B. Handrinos
22 Dec 2020, 5:08 PM
I found this uninspired
on you turned me evil by baphomet
22 Dec 2020, 5:09 PM
Not bad!
on Queen Of The Ring by baphomet
22 Dec 2020, 5:25 PM
Annoying you are using Hsiwej = Jewish backwards
Also, so many spelling errors get annoying to read
Also, so many spelling errors get annoying to read
on Why You All Suck by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
22 Dec 2020, 5:57 PM
made me laugh!