Poemranker [20 most recent comments by Bill Z Bub (541-560) and replies]

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on Life of some girl. by Plasticgirlwithgun 28 Nov 2002, 3:36 PM

Not bad, but somehow I wanted it to rhyme. The fourth line should be
"Black nails on my fist". but thats just me. I like the "Just choke" part.
And the title is good.

on Exhaustion by vulcan 27 Nov 2002, 5:02 PM

This does not comply with the dictates of logical poetics.

But seriously, theres something about the word "mistress" that I just don't like. But I was going along with it until the final line.
Maybe if it was made into a Haiku?

on IM PISSEEDDDDDDDD by little_angel_maria 27 Nov 2002, 4:56 PM

How unseemly.

Theres some genuine emotion there, but I don't care for the imagery.

Welcome to Life.

on Alone by ThoughtfulSoul 27 Nov 2002, 4:50 PM

i feel sad now.

on Check Yourself by INTRANSIT 26 Nov 2002, 9:19 PM

I really liked this one.
kicked me in the gut.
because I'm feeling that way,
I'll go with an eight.

on Cocky by Goose 25 Nov 2002, 7:46 PM

Not bad at all. I like it.