on death by crwncka1
28 Aug 2003, 2:18 PM
I like how you made me say thar, but that was quick lived.1.
on Picasso: A Painters Revenge by SupremeDreamer
28 Aug 2003, 2:01 PM
No color often is the brightest.
on some deleted poem
28 Aug 2003, 11:24 AM
That was just too good.
on some deleted poem
28 Aug 2003, 1:54 PM
Indeed, perhaps nentwined had it upside down?
on some deleted poem
30 Aug 2003, 1:16 PM
You have to respect the way some people drown though. You know sinkers, flailers, floaters. Those in boats.
on Invisible Poo by kthay
28 Aug 2003, 2:17 PM
Another example of a fine observation.
on some deleted poem
30 Aug 2003, 12:37 PM
An impressive twist of fate. Victims of torture often make fine abusers. This poem brought to my heart much shame and retrospection. Where should I put my tip? It's the tip of an iceberg.
on some deleted poem
30 Aug 2003, 12:46 PM
This should be a vilanelle working off of these two sentences.
"Blessed be the cold at heart; their sorrow will not be seen."
"There they trace out fates and futures, battlefields and dreams ".
"Blessed be the cold at heart; their sorrow will not be seen."
"There they trace out fates and futures, battlefields and dreams ".
on some deleted poem
28 Aug 2003, 11:19 AM
I believe episode thirty seven of the oldie but goodie hit series "kung fu" with david carradine delt with this 'most' perplexing evolution of relationships. It was called "how the west was one" and involved the first sanfrasiscian dry cleanery... Oned by a jewish china man named Kim jungian Duckinstein fighting for his right to keep stains at bay. With the help of a white man (Mr. Carradine) impersonating a shaolin monk. He DID! Isn't that exciting?
on hells atrium by crwncka1
28 Aug 2003, 2:21 PM
Let me guess... you are a lonely piece of poop look for a way back up and in. That's just brilliant 10 CHUDS FOR YOU.
on some deleted poem
27 Aug 2003, 12:57 PM
It gets cliched at the end, but it starts off very strong and well balanced.
on Birds of Paradise by Domus
28 Aug 2003, 2:58 PM
"Soother her needless anxieties and
sonstant affronts." i believe there is a typo in here or two.
sonstant affronts." i believe there is a typo in here or two.
on What you know by INTRANSIT
27 Aug 2003, 12:55 PM
A precious observation of self. I would remove the date and end it like.
"in this junkyard of bodies, hoping for an end
to these means."
"in this junkyard of bodies, hoping for an end
to these means."
on some deleted poem
28 Aug 2003, 11:27 AM
Champion! Heroic! wait... I think your teeth should get suck in the mud instead.
on Easter Egg Soup by kthay
28 Aug 2003, 3:04 PM
sounds like a toss.
on Something on my Shoe by kthay
28 Aug 2003, 2:16 PM
Yes, I've been beat for similiar.
on Naughty Word Game by kthay
28 Aug 2003, 2:29 PM
Crotchless floss gumming.
on some deleted poem
29 Aug 2003, 8:00 PM
Yes! I love when he ABC'S
on some deleted poem
30 Aug 2003, 12:42 PM
This piece would work if it was halved and doubled. Do you understand? Like this.
Blessed be the cold at heart;
Their sorrow is not seen
to those who wish to kill;
They hold the aces in their hands,
and like some obscene cataract
let them fall to the earth
where the wayward will;
There they trace out fates
and futures, battlefields and dreams –
They know the future and do not care;
let the world go still!
Blessed be the cold at heart;
Their sorrow is not seen
to those who wish to kill;
They hold the aces in their hands,
and like some obscene cataract
let them fall to the earth
where the wayward will;
There they trace out fates
and futures, battlefields and dreams –
They know the future and do not care;
let the world go still!