on Goldenshoes Shane by dantron
15 Aug 2003, 11:32 AM
Yes! NO!!!!!! 0.
replying on Rearview mirrors by horus8
15 Aug 2003, 11:27 AM
Indiscrete (Free shit) by A Hostess ding dong
Some say methinks I'm shit,
Paranoid to fight the, shit
The void that shits,the void who shats,
The void that preys,prays gays-
Gays first tingin the morn,
Because we porn,what those who have gone before Him,have shite.
Don't I fucking bite?
For when we are shit,
Some,He says,must shat,
That invalid wound of being a blind shite,
and for the rest of my shlife,
The megre,insignificant and wretched,
Shit...Our foolish...- Shat
are foolhardy puissant shites,
And precarious fob eachother off as shites,
Whose persona is not just yellow shite,
but also comes in green and black
basically alien shite and nigger shat
Forget their ignorance-through the leviashite,
So is it best,not to be the best, and
just don't give a shite
The distinctive,innate and innocuous,
But just..... No Ordinary shoetry
but some complex motherfuckin' shit
the only thinh hoatile aboet me and
my poetry is my teil mascara.
Sorry, I couldn't hear you.
What did you say? "This place is a zoo"
"Or pass the bag and glue?" or was it
"Have you seen my shoe?"
Or was it more like a "Hey, fuck you too"
?
Some say methinks I'm shit,
Paranoid to fight the, shit
The void that shits,the void who shats,
The void that preys,prays gays-
Gays first tingin the morn,
Because we porn,what those who have gone before Him,have shite.
Don't I fucking bite?
For when we are shit,
Some,He says,must shat,
That invalid wound of being a blind shite,
and for the rest of my shlife,
The megre,insignificant and wretched,
Shit...Our foolish...- Shat
are foolhardy puissant shites,
And precarious fob eachother off as shites,
Whose persona is not just yellow shite,
but also comes in green and black
basically alien shite and nigger shat
Forget their ignorance-through the leviashite,
So is it best,not to be the best, and
just don't give a shite
The distinctive,innate and innocuous,
But just..... No Ordinary shoetry
but some complex motherfuckin' shit
the only thinh hoatile aboet me and
my poetry is my teil mascara.
Sorry, I couldn't hear you.
What did you say? "This place is a zoo"
"Or pass the bag and glue?" or was it
"Have you seen my shoe?"
Or was it more like a "Hey, fuck you too"
?
on Suburban Horror by phbiscuit
15 Aug 2003, 12:51 AM
The end was a toss, and you need an i in patiently, otherwise some very good parts. 7.
on unbroken by roses are read
15 Aug 2003, 12:47 AM
Good, but it could use an edit. 8.
replying on Rearview mirrors by horus8
14 Aug 2003, 8:13 PM
YES! YES! AND I ESPECIALLY LIKE HOW I RHYMED 'ABOUT' WITH... 'ABOUT'. I thought that was just damn genius.
on drought on talkin river by richa
14 Aug 2003, 8:11 PM
Hot hot heat.
on what is meant to be after me by Prince of Void
14 Aug 2003, 1:55 PM
Well, that was a cupped handfull of steaming hot piss.
on The Musician by Carvaceous
13 Aug 2003, 10:34 AM
Just one. More obos and less fodder.
on Young America by Wulf
13 Aug 2003, 10:29 AM
"precursor of death, self condemnation" "of" could be 'to'or 'for'.
"those whom choose an other path" "an" could 'the'.
"and the prostitute you have all ways been" 'always' would work better. Although. I do think that was a rather creative way of saying it also.
"those whom choose an other path" "an" could 'the'.
"and the prostitute you have all ways been" 'always' would work better. Although. I do think that was a rather creative way of saying it also.
on Molecular Parasitology Nerdcore Rap by Retaliate
13 Aug 2003, 12:18 AM
Sounds like you need a vacation.
on A Day Like The Last by dragonfly
11 Aug 2003, 9:09 PM
"I'm a 20 year old gay college student in San Francisco. Nuff said. = )" I believe that there's never enough to say about that personally.
on Concieted Checkmate. by LuckyJoe
11 Aug 2003, 7:57 PM
Yes, and castles gallop very well. You are a sod, and a cad.
on one day, one moment by crwncka1
11 Aug 2003, 7:02 PM
Yes, surely and what pearls to lose at that aye?
on four walls by crwncka1
11 Aug 2003, 6:57 PM
Your baby needs to bite off your fat bitch nipple. Pear assed hacks.
on fallen love by crwncka1
11 Aug 2003, 6:54 PM
Yes, it's the "foil age" alright. Just keep smoking yours.
on American Hiker by Garrett S Sexton
11 Aug 2003, 6:44 PM
how about a jump?
on Please vote zero by King Abdullah I
11 Aug 2003, 6:40 PM
10!