on Dirge by Nicholas Jones
13 Jun 2003, 2:30 PM
I would totally lose the last line, and end at found.
on MotherF*ckers Who Fuck Above/Two Story Apartment by JoyLuck
25 Jun 2003, 10:53 PM
An achievement of the highest order, but I thought you'd at least have a cactus or a cat Settle.
on Twennotmety by Brian Tiensvold
25 Jun 2003, 11:01 PM
I believe it's spelled "while" young man. Carry on.
on Life's sad song by Brian Tiensvold
25 Jun 2003, 11:05 PM
"Giving me reson to be." Dude, totally, last week my bong did the same.
on Life's sad song by Brian Tiensvold
25 Jun 2003, 11:06 PM
"now... it donsn't seem to work at all" Is Don not feeling well?
on Breaking Breath by daniella
21 Jun 2003, 6:25 AM
Another tickler
on where once by daniella
21 Jun 2003, 6:27 AM
Oddly compelling enough
on White Candle by crwncka1
21 Jun 2003, 6:31 AM
Thorazine
on Small Place by crwncka1
21 Jun 2003, 6:50 AM
Well, at least your poetry maintains a theme. All be it that theme is a shit soda with no straw or lid, more power to you for doing it, but geezads your grasp of the art form is handless, poetry should be an internally delivered representitive of something almost unvoiceable, a reversable 3d puzzle from way deep within the subconcious. Allowing you to learn more about yourself and the world around you. What you've done here is just fallen in love and gone pure stupid, but in your pheremonic stupor you are oblivious and are of the opinion that because your love is so terrific and new and special, than so must be your poetry about it. Unfortunately, this is a temporary reaction to a temporary disease that will bring your defenses down setting you up to be viciously pummeled and tortured by the rack of longing, coupled by fear, and the human instinct to reproduce. I would prepare for stifling inevitable jealousy and horrifficaly depressing loss. Have fun.
on Nonentities by scitz
19 Jun 2003, 4:08 PM
See, unfortunately the first line's still over by one, not that I give a pazow, but there are those that, well, you know.
so try saying "Love's idiom" in the posessive.
so try saying "Love's idiom" in the posessive.
on some deleted poem
19 Jun 2003, 4:11 PM
Superb
on some deleted poem
13 Jun 2003, 2:28 PM
Yes, but as a reader, tell me, why should I give a shit? Once you've figured that out you'll also discover what's wrong with this haiku.
on some deleted poem
12 Jun 2003, 11:54 AM
So I suggest you keep that in mind next time you decide to randomly drop 0's on good poetry my friend. I will systematically go through your poetry and unleash, do you catch my drift fucknose?
on some deleted poem
11 Jun 2003, 10:32 PM
did you mean Cyclical?
on The Girl for Me by DeadtotheWorld
11 Jun 2003, 10:36 PM
No.