on \The Moment/ by Son Of A Bitch
17 Aug 2003, 11:16 AM
What exactly is a carcase of snow?
on letting off angry emotions by LosT SykoPath
5 Aug 2003, 10:36 PM
Murder is for the brave, knaive.
on Playa been caught in their games. (revised/new) by LuckyJoe
10 Aug 2003, 4:00 PM
I would add a penny and a monkey named Lenny, Spruce.
on Provacation by J.B. Manning
20 Aug 2003, 1:44 PM
Keep on trucking.
on Popularity by Ditchamal
5 Aug 2003, 12:45 PM
Neither, it's Stridex.
on Joe is Dead Now by Freethinker1602
5 Aug 2003, 11:56 AM
Seems like a cleaner edit.
on some deleted poem
6 Aug 2003, 4:34 PM
Speaking of poof where have you been?
on some deleted poem
5 Aug 2003, 10:09 PM
That's it. I quit.
on Wha you funkin wan? by ==Doylum
20 Aug 2003, 4:54 PM
Manuensis with a side of hot musturd.
on some deleted poem
20 Aug 2003, 1:16 PM
I sort of liked this.
on some deleted poem
20 Aug 2003, 7:03 PM
Yes, I know, how do bald people White Lion fans even grow there hair out like that anymore anyway? Is all of that stringy dry blond hair from the sides of their heads and the backs of their necks? I'd wear a bandanna too. If I looked like that and hailed from Jersey. I skipped the ending, because it sucked like plecostamus.
on The Belgian Bookworm [revised] by DreamerSupreme
6 Aug 2003, 4:30 PM
"of ice colliding with glass
in that grapy ocean" I would consider rewording this with an emphasis on losing grapy and ocean.
"Your face would be in a book
as you slowly ate.
Michael Crichton, Dick Francis,
Clive Cussler, and Tom Clancy-
Just a few of your favorite authors
in your large library." Hee he, you are a riot! yes, the library... Sounds stocked from rafters to sagging bottom shelf with such power hitters as Sidney Sheldon and Dean Koontz with a dash of Ken Folliet. You are too cute.
Great title.
in that grapy ocean" I would consider rewording this with an emphasis on losing grapy and ocean.
"Your face would be in a book
as you slowly ate.
Michael Crichton, Dick Francis,
Clive Cussler, and Tom Clancy-
Just a few of your favorite authors
in your large library." Hee he, you are a riot! yes, the library... Sounds stocked from rafters to sagging bottom shelf with such power hitters as Sidney Sheldon and Dean Koontz with a dash of Ken Folliet. You are too cute.
Great title.
on Angel by abecedarian
6 Aug 2003, 4:32 PM
Due to my condition. I must request you stop with this nonsense about cherubian intervention immediately.
on ooohhh...subs by Myte342
4 Aug 2003, 9:51 PM
You're an obvious "Lap snorkel".
on A parking lot, a smoke, and the pleasure of being alone by thepinkbunnyofdoom
5 Aug 2003, 11:52 AM
Your first statement is powerful, you need to have her with eyebrows and fourteen or twelve toes by the end, or you'll story will die, worthless. Once again your first line sets the pace, so deliver the goods that's what we're interested in. Why, How, who, where, we know when and who you are already, you mentioned ghost town so get there man.
on Summer by MaliqaTara
5 Aug 2003, 1:52 PM
This is such a great poem.
on Fish by http://findingwater
4 Aug 2003, 7:50 PM
Ha ha... So did my date. Her chest smelled of the Sea. Her trap of fish.
on He's Dead You Bastards (for zzinia) by scitz
5 Aug 2003, 11:47 AM
"His girlfriend left him for some guy who could drive," Quite possibly the funniest line imaginable. But if you destroy the Angel, I'll have nothing to do?
on Love-Anemic by dragonfly
20 Aug 2003, 1:09 PM
This is a lyric and it's barely a seven.
on Palm Field Park by SupremeDreamer
5 Aug 2003, 10:06 PM
Or back on.