replying on Pine by andrewjthomas
30 Apr 2003, 5:31 PM
cool, care to elaborate? thanks
replying on sunday morning precarious by andrewjthomas
29 Apr 2003, 5:05 PM
yeah, i need to go back and edit the poem to make that clearer... we didn't fuck... we were both staying in the same apt one night with mutual friends... i woke up early, she thought no one was awake yet... :)
replying on Brother by andrewjthomas
29 Apr 2003, 4:54 PM
thanks... my only gripe is that you lose the formatting here
i wrote this for my brother's 30th b-day
and there are exactly 30 lines
and each line grows a syllable (first line is one, last line has 30)
and because of the line wrapping, you don't see that so clearly
i wrote this for my brother's 30th b-day
and there are exactly 30 lines
and each line grows a syllable (first line is one, last line has 30)
and because of the line wrapping, you don't see that so clearly
replying on The Blooding by Mr Pig
29 Apr 2003, 3:38 PM
i'm gonna have to agree with you here
for instance, why even state the last three lines?
you should trust the reader to infer all of that
(i do have to say "texture of black jelly" is an inspired line)
for instance, why even state the last three lines?
you should trust the reader to infer all of that
(i do have to say "texture of black jelly" is an inspired line)
on I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' by JakeBike
29 Apr 2003, 3:06 PM
amen, but you forgot the "goth" sub-genre... where common themes and words include "blood, darkness, soul, cutting"