replying on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH
8 Mar 2003, 2:50 AM
haha tru dat
replying on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH
8 Mar 2003, 2:49 AM
You talk alot for what little you say.
replying on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH
8 Mar 2003, 2:48 AM
YIH
replying on vent tent by Crakyamuni
8 Mar 2003, 1:13 AM
Rhyme is a bitch pure and simple. Hardly taken seriously these days along with meter. People see it as a dead art form. But I do like that fact taht you're trying it and strongly encourage it. Screw with it. Don't be afraid to do stupid rhymes. Who knows. And cool brackets and stuff.
replying on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH
8 Mar 2003, 1:09 AM
Hahaha thanks. I like your forwardness.
replying on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH
8 Mar 2003, 1:08 AM
Coming from someone with your talent, I'm flattered. I thank you very much and thank you for the support you've given a fledgling.
replying on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH
8 Mar 2003, 1:07 AM
Thanks... I didn't mean to be that sick, but maybe I did. Thanks tho.
replying on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH
8 Mar 2003, 1:06 AM
Hahaha thanks for you support. *shrug* Maybe he is, may he isn't. Though he should be slightly more kind. It doesn't matter if this isn't reality... there are good ways of putting things and bad ways.
replying on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH
5 Mar 2003, 2:07 AM
????????? I'm really confused....
1) I'm Asian. Not a wigger.
2) Give what you receive. I was honest and straighforward with you and told you merely what I thought.
3) Please be mature and don't say anything about my mother.
1) I'm Asian. Not a wigger.
2) Give what you receive. I was honest and straighforward with you and told you merely what I thought.
3) Please be mature and don't say anything about my mother.
replying on The Drunkest ever by horus8
5 Mar 2003, 2:01 AM
btw... yeah you're a poet but you don't need to be a snob about it.
replying on The Drunkest ever by horus8
5 Mar 2003, 2:00 AM
nix what i said about the descrip... it was great. anywho.;
on The Drunkest ever by horus8
5 Mar 2003, 1:58 AM
Ok... overall pretty good. Creative rhymes and some really good description. But... if you're gonna use meter, be consistent. If you read it, you expect some more meter. Then again, it could be part of your theme. *shrug* Some of the rhymes are good but too clustered. It's just too much to absorb. The continuity of rhyme and rhythm aren't there but work well where employed. And again, continuity with punctuation is kinda questionable.
on vent tent by Crakyamuni
5 Mar 2003, 1:49 AM
Creative use of rhyme... but also maybe a problem? Rhyme can be troublesome when it comes to serious poetry. But I do like your rhymes... creative. You might want to look at the continuity of your explitives. They should be somewhat close in length, but your first one is longer than the others.
replying on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH
5 Mar 2003, 1:43 AM
KL