on i would have you by silvertongueddevil
4 Aug 2002, 2:26 PM
not as naughty as some of you others, make them more dirty i like that.
on Lucky's Day by razorgrin
7 Aug 2002, 3:59 PM
Why sebaceous? Let me englighten you. Bachus is a cake retentive lad, his keyboard is awash with pastry, his monitor drips with lard, whilst looking at his oily taxan all he could think of was fat lovely fat.
on some deleted poem
4 Aug 2002, 2:23 PM
oh god
on some deleted poem
7 Aug 2002, 3:50 PM
Bachus's arse
emit great words of wisdom
enlightens us all
emit great words of wisdom
enlightens us all
on Nobody's Story (A guide thru chaos) by horus8
7 Aug 2002, 4:03 PM
Just a few problems with this one. However nothing a Doylum materclass will not sort out. I would suggest changing one aspect of it. When i write i try to get into a certain frame of mind to really set the scene, almost like an actor trying to "be" his part. I let feeling wash over me sensations.. sorry getting carried away, back to the aspect i would change - the words
on some deleted poem
7 Aug 2002, 6:09 AM
No, No, playdo definatly hits the make, one can make the most freakish of things out of playdo. Now there something to think on
on some deleted poem
7 Aug 2002, 6:23 AM
plus no rhymes, non rhyming poems always seem to me as though the writter just couldn't be arsed to write a book. There are also an excuss to be poncy with punctuation and grammer which I hate. Some of the best poem as rymeing poems its just that most people are crap at it, and try to show depth through abandoning it.
on some deleted poem
7 Aug 2002, 4:30 AM
The student nazis are out again, with their dictionary facism. "Everyone must do things just like me, otherwise there would be chaos" You understood the fucking words didn't you you pompous arseholes? why then the need for everyone to spell precisely the same. Moreover English people spell differently to people form the colonies. Furthermore, had you bothered to read the young mans synopsis you would know the reason for his miffpelt words. IF your going to castigate him, do it for the poetry not for the spelling, you simpering dictionary acolytes. I misspell because in ignorant, stupid and unpleasant my poetry is shit for similar reasons, what prey tell are your excuses writteninskin and Bachus
on Johnny Nasty by peotaster
5 Aug 2002, 4:55 PM
I feel another excrement achivement award coming on however it is not to be laid at the door of peotater but at you newhowl, for pompous bleating from the pulpit, you student nazi. You have not even written poetry yet how could you know of its demands. Let me see you work if its not in by tomorrow detention shall ensue
on Love Obsession (the stalker's song) by evergreen
5 Aug 2002, 6:34 PM
with the wrong chords and melody this would make a really bad song. Whoreus8 stating the bleedin obvious. What sort of music do you like whoreus? - gee i like good music.
Evergreen - super little poem thingy, but not as good as the other one about a total slag waking up next to someone they don't even remember..... It wasn't a personal experience was it oh shit i may have offended again
Evergreen - super little poem thingy, but not as good as the other one about a total slag waking up next to someone they don't even remember..... It wasn't a personal experience was it oh shit i may have offended again
on School girls lovely school girls by ==Doylum
5 Aug 2002, 6:50 PM
Yes i take your critiques on board, however i still feel we need to take vis-a-vis the forecoming masterpiece, whoes title i have yet to finalise. CHrist I fucking love you. Opps sorry for the outburst
on some deleted poem
5 Aug 2002, 7:02 PM
skin could you skip and giggle for me onc more time it would make a poor old talentless wanker so happy, could you dear, just for me
on The Set Back by horus8
4 Aug 2002, 2:36 PM
why do i keep being presented with an poem entitled The Set Back. Where ever i turn i am asked to vote: please vote upon these words. Scart line in line line out 50Hz 240V 50W Achtung! entfernen Sie nicht Abdeckung
on Give me a goal by nentwined
4 Aug 2002, 2:41 PM
find yer own bloody goal ye lazy toerag. Expecting us lot to come up with one for you, as if its not enough that we slave night and day writting crap to fill your site up with, you want more. Are not my Wordes enough. If anyone does find one for you can i have one to
on you scare me like the rollercoaster by silvertongueddevil
4 Aug 2002, 2:46 PM
oh whoow. I think i shall abandon my love for Handsom Pete and lick the horn-ed head of the silver cunning linguist.
on For Benjamin by moonUnit
4 Aug 2002, 2:53 PM
Amythest you've never written anything and you welcome people to the site, bloody hell. Quite like you poem don't go of the rails and start getting poncy like many people here.
on some deleted poem
7 Aug 2002, 6:17 AM
forced
on some deleted poem
5 Aug 2002, 6:42 PM
oh shit you've copyrighted your words and i so wanted to steal them. where will material for my forcoming book "Guff and Bladerwater" come from now?
on some deleted poem
4 Aug 2002, 2:48 PM
about as welcome as a picked egg fueled fart under the duvet