on some deleted poem
24 Aug 2003, 7:07 PM
Blessed with 8.
on I'm Back! by wEdible Underpantsw
26 Aug 2003, 3:19 PM
sorry.. but your going to be owned.
on A Poet's Rifle by SupremeDreamer
22 Aug 2003, 11:56 PM
This is a remake of Deranged Sailor: Sea Sickness..
on Candle Lit Night by LuckyJoe
23 Aug 2003, 1:37 AM
ok, good, i like the first draft, but we must consider:
GETTING RID OF THE CANDY COATED SUGAR FILLING!!!.. lots of shit here is not needed.
Hear it sing, <--- this was filler..
closer <--- inserted just to sound cool? bad bad bad!!!
This [dark] night {everything} [existing] feels right.
[Allowing it to concurâ¦]
{} means: it might be better to get rid of it.
[] means: TRASH IT!!
man, the way im going, your poem will be a tap dancin midget!!! night is always dark bozo, ive been out of my house during the evenins ya know@!
[Allowing it to concurâ¦] wtf? stop being fancy, if your going to be, atleast do it right!!!
i think you get my overall message.. i hope..
GETTING RID OF THE CANDY COATED SUGAR FILLING!!!.. lots of shit here is not needed.
Hear it sing, <--- this was filler..
closer <--- inserted just to sound cool? bad bad bad!!!
This [dark] night {everything} [existing] feels right.
[Allowing it to concurâ¦]
{} means: it might be better to get rid of it.
[] means: TRASH IT!!
man, the way im going, your poem will be a tap dancin midget!!! night is always dark bozo, ive been out of my house during the evenins ya know@!
[Allowing it to concurâ¦] wtf? stop being fancy, if your going to be, atleast do it right!!!
i think you get my overall message.. i hope..
on Candle Lit Night by LuckyJoe
23 Aug 2003, 1:41 AM
no reason to fight the darkness - how do you propose to do this? i know!!! A FLASHLIGHT!!
oooo i see two lover birds makin out!! quick, lars get the camera will ya??? i want to capture this moment for eternity!!
oooo i see two lover birds makin out!! quick, lars get the camera will ya??? i want to capture this moment for eternity!!
on some deleted poem
23 Aug 2003, 12:37 PM
greek mythology.. never much cared for this kind of poetry.. oh well, one day i'll suddenly start enjoying it.
on On The Floor of the Hospital by Fear of Garbage
23 Aug 2003, 12:40 PM
the writing here was banal.. dull.. it felt dead.. was that the intention? 7
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2003, 10:53 PM
what was the point of resurrecting this? lol.
on A Manifesto on Murder by Jeremi B. Handrinos
21 Aug 2003, 6:45 PM
hrmm. your right, theres lots of profit in murder. ok bastage, ill write a murder poem..
heres a nine
heres a nine
on fragile by Bill Z Bub
21 Aug 2003, 7:39 PM
hrmm. Interesting. 8
on Camera Obscura by Fear of Garbage
21 Aug 2003, 7:42 PM
hrmm.. an obsession with black oceans man?.. repetitive use of a word gets boring, fast. other than that, i liked it. blessed with 8
on Caffeinated Contemplations by J.B. Manning
21 Aug 2003, 3:32 PM
not a bad rant.. 8.
on When He's In Me by J.B. Manning
21 Aug 2003, 3:35 PM
Lightly slightly - pick one and move on.. please dont repeat the same thing twice for a sing line.. its redundant..
Not a bad erotic write.. but i think you could revise this to a much better output.. up to you anyway.
blessed with 8.
Not a bad erotic write.. but i think you could revise this to a much better output.. up to you anyway.
blessed with 8.
on some deleted poem
21 Aug 2003, 5:05 PM
evil doers? tsk, i dont agree that we are evil doers, nor do i think folks fear speaking against the 8, i sure dont when i feel the need to. ;)
Title sucks.. overall though it was well written, i think its the best poem written against poemranker that ive seen.
that deserves a 10.
Title sucks.. overall though it was well written, i think its the best poem written against poemranker that ive seen.
that deserves a 10.
on The Angel at the arcade (this is actually an 'acne') by scitz
22 Aug 2003, 11:07 PM
thats one damn good pimple.. crappier than ever.. indeed, its acne.. 10!
on To My Grave by Bonehiss
23 Aug 2003, 2:20 AM
horus, you bastage, i know its you.
on Picasso (Limericks) by TanHand
28 Aug 2003, 4:14 AM
Tanhand.. dont try to out do me in picasso poetry, i can get lengthy and zone into the soul of it.. or i think so.. what do you think? check out my two latest posts.
i bless this with 9 btw.
i bless this with 9 btw.
on Women have Babies and Men Murder. by horus8
21 Aug 2003, 3:01 PM
ice scream.. nice, i love that. 10.
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2003, 10:51 PM
boys only? cmon settle, i know you came out the closet concerning your homosexuality, but some of us still enjoy casual sex with women..
spell check like horus said, and consider how you might be able to make your imagery clearer, aswell as applying more focus on the topic your writing on.
other than that joe, you got yourself an 8 from me, i hope to see revisions.