on Happy 29. a little late by A. Nomaly
2 Sep 2003, 10:43 AM
Nice.
on some deleted poem
1 Sep 2003, 9:09 AM
should say "I've run away"- but no need to delete your poetry.
on Ohio's Dirty Natives by Fear of Garbage
1 Sep 2003, 9:07 AM
Awesome. I liked the repetition and the flow of the poem and the precise descriptions.
on some deleted poem
1 Sep 2003, 8:21 AM
I love your food and love images together. I would like to hear even more about the food.
on justly now included by A. Nomaly
2 Sep 2003, 10:45 AM
Abuelita? Little grandmother?
I like your style.
I like your style.
on some deleted poem
2 Sep 2003, 11:04 AM
Step away from the hashish and nobody gets hurt!
on I'm going back to art school by TanHand
2 Sep 2003, 11:01 AM
You did architecture studios twice. You are right about the acceptance level at art school, I used to work at "MECA" with my hairy legs.
on Shi by William Delacroix
1 Sep 2003, 8:39 AM
What a waste of your recyclable organs, to publish the product on poemranker, where all poems, even the worst of them, are underappreciated. Anyway, I think it was a great poem- but wouldn't kill myself for its writing. 10
on some deleted poem
1 Sep 2003, 8:24 AM
Take out the question mark after see and leave the one after "sexily bike messanging". Why is "vegan" in quotation marks, is there some doubt that his ingredients are animal free? I think I know this man you are talking about (if indeed this is fact, not fiction) - has the initials of NH and long dread locks? We'll talk.
on Untitled II by greym0on
1 Sep 2003, 8:56 AM
"Your arms that were just long enough
to wrap around me" - this didn't quite work for me, made me think that this love of your was a small child.
It is a good thing I am in a dramatic & romatic mood today- 9
to wrap around me" - this didn't quite work for me, made me think that this love of your was a small child.
It is a good thing I am in a dramatic & romatic mood today- 9
on some deleted poem
1 Sep 2003, 9:12 AM
Nice. I love those images, and how you've placed the corpse in a prison of mute desire for your enviable possessions.
on A Manifesto on Murder by Jeremi B. Handrinos
21 Aug 2003, 6:15 PM
You forgot private, for-profit prisons (if you have money to invest in stock, and you don't care about what atrocities you are encouraging, this is the place to make some money) and the psychologists and social workers who evaluate the convicted murderers when the death penalty is in question. S'quite lucrative.
on Provacation by J.B. Manning
20 Aug 2003, 5:05 PM
I'm pro-vacation too. I would like to take this moment to celebrate the end of my 90 day probationary period at my current job. Anyway, you don't need "sort-of" in front of gestation. Interesting piece.
on some deleted poem
20 Aug 2003, 5:13 PM
I got the metaphor of the coffee cup candle, but it seemed like a typo of handle at first glance. Good though, I like the language. You could use an apostrophe in "lawn's"- did you mean "lawn's open plain"?
on True Respect (A Distant Adoration) by abecedarian
1 Sep 2003, 8:18 AM
Beautiful. I like "buzzing mass of fickle need". But then, I'm fickle.
on some deleted poem
21 Aug 2003, 6:20 PM
Yes, I see.
incites me to rush
in close, to enjoy
the feel of skin
quickly turned
into dark colors. "
Nice, but could use a few apostrophes.