on Time by mozac
28 Dec 2003, 10:15 AM
I think you wrote this very effectively. You keep presenting cetain images and pacing an layering certain word together in order to keep the reader drawn in. Sometimes that's hard to do with this type of poem.
on Some Suburban Clarity by unknown
28 Dec 2003, 10:20 AM
WOW! I really liked this. I love the way you set this up. It seems to me to be very effective in that it feels like a movement between two people. Very well done!