Re: a comment on American Idle by wilco	5-May-04/8:29 AM
Quoting Tool lyrics?
Re: a comment on American Idle by wilco	5-May-04/8:26 AM
Android Bjork 69ing another android Bjork has to be the second most arousing thing I've ever seen, after CLS's website photos. The 1st "snare" remix of AIFOL is the best. Bjork I can understand some, but Tool and Eagles??? They've only written one song each!! Come on!
Re: a comment on The Influence of Anxiety by Nicholas Jones	5-May-04/7:54 AM
Jesus.
Re: a comment on American Idle by wilco	5-May-04/7:54 AM
I don't think she's your type. Have you seen the video for "All Is Full of Love"?
Re: American Idle by wilco	5-May-04/7:43 AM
Speaking of those Idol shows, Ben Folds' "Army" is a great model for anyone trying to write ace pop songs. Bjork's "Army of Me" is not.
Re: American Idle by wilco	5-May-04/7:31 AM
10 for "fatigue is my color". There are so many things about this poem I'd change if it were mine; that line isn't one of them.
Re: a comment on California triolets by zodiac	5-May-04/7:28 AM
Ha ha.
Re: a comment on California triolets by zodiac	5-May-04/3:49 AM
Hey, there's an expression that wasn't used up before.
Re: a comment on Where Have All the Punk Rockers Gone? by wilco	4-May-04/7:49 PM
Are you seeing the new Pixies tour? They should still be playing in one of those Northern territories - Chicago and Toronto in November, I think. I hear Frank Black is worse than ever.
Re: a comment on As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha	4-May-04/7:28 PM
Notice I added rhymes.
Re: a comment on As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha	4-May-04/7:23 PM
Looking at it now, I don't know why I didn't go with a lot of easier (and at least decasyllabic) word-choices. These days I wouldn't really give a fuck except to convey something of the same feeling of meter. I did Alfonsina Storni's "Ancestral Burden (Peso ancestral)" like this: You’d always tell me: My father never wept; My grandfather, never, nor his father before; You told me, and so the men of our race have kept As hard as ore. So you would tell me, and your tear would fall Into my open mouth - A poison so deadly I never could have found in a vial so small, Or given so readily. Weak woman, fragile woman who bore it, The heaviness of Mankind, you taught me your hunger. Oh, but I feel this soul of mine can’t support Your burden much longer!
Re: a comment on As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha	4-May-04/7:00 PM
I see now "you were" should've been "there were" - a beginner's mistake. But then I couldn't have rhymed "you" below.
Re: a comment on As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha	4-May-04/6:53 PM
Now just imagine if Catullus had said silly things like that. You'd be translating Catullus's translations of, I don't know, Sumerian or caveman or something right now, instead of translating Catullus's original poems. Of course, I wish sometimes Pound had stuck with translation, but that's another matter. Hey, here's one from my archives - what do you think? It's Sor Juana Inés de la Cruz: If one were to consider the risks of the sea No one would ever embark; if one were to see The dangers beforehand, he would never dare Provoke the valiant bull; if one took care To consider the bolting horse’s fury, no Wise horseman, however sober was his hand Would ever face him, to make him slow or stand. But if you were that one so daring, though You knew the peril, like old Apollo you Would want to guide that horse with your tight-gloved Hand, the speeding chariot washed in a haze Of azure sunlight, all that you could do, do, And not consider all of this you’ve loved, That this is how it should be all your days.
Re: a comment on Funeral of My Childhood by Spindle	4-May-04/6:44 PM
Don't be silly. Anyone can do one, as you'd know if you'd actually read your memos, instead of just making sailor hats out of them and ludicrously insisting that we all call you "Admiral." MEDIOCRITY CODE: 8074D421 -11- Untitled 5 by francis nor capule beats the shit out of it though. See for yourself: MEDIOCRITY CODE: 1DF4B4B1 -17-
Re: a comment on As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha	4-May-04/6:16 PM
The last line's not awful - you should just put a comma after yet instead of the Victorian exclamatory and run it into the the refrain. Congratulations, I find it sings swimmingly.
Re: Where Have All the Punk Rockers Gone? by wilco	4-May-04/4:11 PM
"Just give me a beat that I can dance to!" -zodiac's ace band, The Brotherhood of the Righteous and Harmonious Fist
Re: a comment on As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha	4-May-04/3:53 PM
Perhaps you could change "with spears" to "his rear", and so on.
Re: a comment on As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha	4-May-04/3:51 PM
Be as liberal with it as you want, especially around the part about the volcano - and the refrain, which I can't think of any way to say that's not ridiculous in English. If you will do this for me, I promise not to make fun of you for at least one post.
Re: As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha	4-May-04/3:48 PM
Cipote, Do you do requests? I'm looking for an English translation for Jacques Brel's "Ne Me Quite Pas" that goes with the melody and doesn't sound utterly gay, unlike my French.
Re: tribute by francis nor capule	4-May-04/12:08 PM
It would probably be better if it made a bit of sense, whatever form it's in. If this poem is, as I imagine it is, about how some vaguely-defined (read 'nonexistent') INSTITUTION forces everyone to write in rhyme and prettily-formed phrases exactly like the 'Masters', and how much of a rebel you and a few other daring souls are who take poetry out for wild formless spins at night, then it's utter crap. In school (and I imagine you're thinking largely of some high-school-type setting) you're taught a bunch of stuffy carefully-metered rhyming poems and very few daring non-careful poems because you are being taught much of the best that poetry has done from its beginnings (in English at least), meaning 1200 years of rhyme and meter and pretty much only 150 years of not. And because in the lower-grades teachers are more likely to teach the rhymed and metered ones (like "My lady's eyes are nothing like the sun") because it gives them a whole lot of easy things to talk about which aren't closely related to its content, while such mostly non-rhymed, non-metered later poems as "The Waste Land" don't. If you have a problem with that, talk to your teacher, who, if he/she is anything like most American teachers, is hugely undertrained and liable to stick with what's easy. Or stick your head out a window and see what's going on everywhere else in the world, where non-rhyme non-meter has UTTERLY DOMINATED THINGS so long that many people are bored with it and looking for other things to do, such as write some kind of rhyme/meter again. Thank you.