on how i love by elizabethann
25 Mar 2004, 2:48 PM
Still, it's nice. A humble poet is not to be taken lightly :)
on some deleted poem
25 Mar 2004, 3:02 PM
Good work, makes you think and connect on different levels. It's too bad that childhood really messes us up as adults.
on The second coming by cleverdevice
28 Mar 2004, 8:55 PM
IMHO, the 4th paragraph needs just a little work, spelling on accompanied? "proclaimed a good" also confuses me just a little.
on some deleted poem
31 Mar 2004, 12:38 PM
It's safer this way I think, it can be the perfect love, internal, without complications. Love on the inside... Good Job!
on some deleted poem
1 Apr 2004, 4:26 AM
I don't know what's going to get you into more trouble. Homosexuals thinking you're comparing them to Jews, or the Jews thinking you're saying theyâre homosexuals. Watch it or you'll find either your bunghole or portfolio violated. Could be both! :)
on A Dangling Poo by zodiac
1 Apr 2004, 4:42 AM
Okay, I get what you mean by "original" now. Just a suggested edit on verse three, "cause I'm Klinger" is good, but maybe "cause I'm a Klinger" would be better?
Otherwise a simply marvelous feast,
on the unknown thoughts of a constipated nugget of furry waste :)
Otherwise a simply marvelous feast,
on the unknown thoughts of a constipated nugget of furry waste :)