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Free verse № 46096

The second coming

Member since 2002 · Posted 3 Apr 2003 · 8 comments

Death stood, forlorn, by the lines of children. His scythe notched, his skeletal arm limp. His bony fingers scratched aimlessly at the course cloth Of his black habit. He should have been staunch, with bleached jaw set. His face should be covered but his eye roved freely. His hood flapped loosely in the wind and flies buzzed As his skull slowly turned towards the light. Placed high before the columns was a mighty gold throne Bedecked in rich jewels, rubies, emeralds, diamonds. But a light far greater stood out upon a fair head. And it shone on all around far and wide. He was accomanied by a thousand glorious angels, Each singing a song of exhaultation, And their voices proclaimed a good, A good lost to this mortal realm two thousand years ago. Each child who passed before him smiled and moved on, Floating up supported by cherubs and seraphims. Through bright white clouds in a azure blue sky Each infant bought forth a note of pure wonder, adding to The exhuberant song of triumph. Death had no place to judge on this Earth And slunk away to bowels of hell to meet an old friend.

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[9] Blindproject217 3-Apr-03/5:11 PM Reply
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[9] Blindproject217 3-Apr-03/5:11 PM Reply
p.s. I love the last line.
[5] lunar 9-Apr-03/11:54 AM Reply
Are you in the alton college poemranker crew AS WELL? god i didnt realise how many of us were on here.
[n/a] cleverdevice › lunar 11-Apr-03/12:26 PM Reply
I am, and pissed that the librarian bitches have cunningly blocked poemranker in the ILC and claim its 'connection speed'
[5] lunar 12-Apr-03/6:12 AM Reply
yeah that did piss me off i dont see whats wrong with this site, cept the swear words, bobjim, gay porn, lesbian porn, raping poems....
[n/a] cleverdevice › lunar 12-Apr-03/1:03 PM Reply
but celebdaq? why, god why?
[9] Ranger › cleverdevice 18-Apr-03/12:49 AM Reply
They aren't pretending that it isn't blocked any more-I asked them and apparantely it's because people were using it for 'inappropriate material', or words to that effect.

BOBJIM!!!

(Love the poem by the way!)
[7] Richard 28-Mar-04/8:55 PM Reply
IMHO, the 4th paragraph needs just a little work, spelling on accompanied? "proclaimed a good" also confuses me just a little.