poemranker ::Stalker by OnTheOtherHand

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Ode № 59919

Stalker

by OnTheOtherHand

Member since 2003 · Posted 8 Aug 2003 · 4 comments

It wasn't strange enough I couldn't get away from you You had to add I had killed you too Your tell-tale heart it beats in my head Why is that when you should be dead? Why do you follow when I run away? I buried you so why can't you stay? I took out your eyes so you couldn't see I took out your tongue yet you still talk to me I threw your corpse in a shallow loch It was found and yet you walk It wasn't strange enough I couldn't get away from you You had to add I had killed you too

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4 comments

[7] http://mulberryfairy 8-Aug-03/5:35 PM Reply
Nice allusion to Poe. It didn't really need the repeated verse at the end. Maybe it would be better if you did half a repeated verse, then changed the second half to give us more info.
[9] SupremeDreamer 8-Aug-03/6:05 PM Reply
Nothing like women to inspire a poets pen to write.. nice. 9.
[3] god'swife 11-Aug-03/8:05 AM Reply
Childish, in every aspect.
[n/a] OneFingerAnswer › god'swife 11-Aug-03/10:55 AM Reply
You really think of it as childish? How'd you get to that?

I'm almost offended but I'd like an explination before I go that far.