poemranker ::Consumer by nothingtoanyone

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Free verse № 101519

Consumer

Member since 2003 · Posted 11 May 2004 · 1 comment

For the first time in all the years that this has been going on I have noticed it. It was in your eyes, eating the person that lay behind them consuming you slowly. Consuming you? No, not you but it is consuming the consumer. Thy who takes in, gets taken. -AND- You have been taken, stolen from me by the liquid that fills you veins. The liquid that you take in, consume more then the air around you. Seeing you like this kills me faster, speeding up the speed of death that is already traveling inside me.

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[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 12-May-04/4:36 PM Reply
"Thy who takes in, gets taken."

"Thy" means "your". You fail.