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Life On Earth

Member since 2002 · Posted 22 Aug 2002 · 12 comments

Life (Freeform) by The Unknown Poet Born without choice, We are thrust into life, Struggling to stay alive, Knowing that we must die, Searching for a God, Who can never be found, Our souls cry out for deliverance, For a way to escape, The terrible realization, That there is no way out!

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[n/a] <~> 22-Aug-02/10:28 AM Reply

oh there is a sure and swift way out. i'll be the first to volunteer to help in THAT endeavor...

[n/a] dougsoderstrom › <~> 3-Aug-04/8:43 AM Reply

Hell is no way out.....It is not deliverance!

[n/a] vulcan 22-Aug-02/10:55 AM Reply

NOT AT ALL NOVEL

[n/a] dougsoderstrom › vulcan 3-Aug-04/8:44 AM Reply

Thanks for the compliment........scumbag!

[n/a] Mephisto 22-Aug-02/2:26 PM Reply

if this is about life it should be much funnier

[n/a] dougsoderstrom › Mephisto 3-Aug-04/8:44 AM Reply

Life is not funny!

[1] god'swife 22-Aug-02/3:15 PM Reply

There is no way out, you are right we're all bound towards death. But that's something a 5 year old discovers. Make this work, focus on some specific experience or moment which made you feel this, and write about the experience, not the philosophy

[n/a] dougsoderstrom › god'swife 3-Aug-04/8:45 AM Reply

Thanks for the rec.

[1] god'swife 25-Aug-02/2:02 PM Reply

I apologize for being rude. i'm embarrased by that first comment I left a few days ago. The point I was trying to make is it's better to use allegory if you want an emoitional response from your audience.

[n/a] dougsoderstrom › god'swife 3-Aug-04/8:47 AM Reply

I understand....and thanks again.

[8] cat 2-Aug-04/11:33 PM Reply

i thought this was cool, who gave this a one, that's total bs, yeah some people hate rhymes, but this had some substance and connection to the every day person who feels trapped...i hoped i spelled rhyme right.

[n/a] dougsoderstrom › cat 3-Aug-04/8:48 AM Reply

Thanks, Cat. Thanks for the nice compliment!