Sonnet № 107358

Tale of a mermaid

Member since 2004 · Posted 5 Jul 2004 · 3 comments

How long I have wished that I could return To the briny depths that was once my home Although I knew all my bridges I'd burn That chance I took, leaving behind that foam It was alas for my obsessive heart That I did choose this impassable path But now my love has preferred to depart I must now endure my family's wrath I can hear them laughing, chanting, taunting Swimming after me, that night long ago Forever hearing, their words just haunting But I didn't care, my heart was aglow Now all I do is sit here and wonder I miss my life in the wet blue yonder

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[7] Dovina 5-Jul-04/9:09 AM Reply

I see the impassable path and your family's wrath, but not quite getting the last line. Was it really impassable?

[n/a] sanity › Dovina 5-Jul-04/2:02 PM Reply

it is the tale of a mermaid who once her path was chosen she would never be able to return to her life as a mermaid, so yes, it was impassable

[4] god'swife 6-Jul-04/7:22 PM Reply

Too many 'I's. Also the language is boring.