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monday v2

Member since 2005 · Posted 14 Oct 2005 · 8 comments

today is the day had a good rest last night i dreamt i was drafted i was unprepared no tools my sister got out of the truck crying i hugged her she walked around a cluttered house with me amalgam of steps and closets i thought i saw my aunt's spare bedroom a feeling of the place on pine she suggested necessities i struggled to find camo pants, plaid shirt my backpack sagging with a few worthless things ready to accept my lot the enemy was already moving on pine street they knew gunshots fear i woke early made french toast and coffee today is the day a new seat on my bicycle backpack with sketchbook and lunch i am prepared

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[n/a] ALChemy 14-Oct-05/1:05 PM Reply

Are you man or woman? Because I've never heard of women being drafted but on the other hand you wear a skirt. Maybe your just Scottish.

[n/a] ay deee › ALChemy 17-Oct-05/8:27 AM Reply

i wear a skirt?

[n/a] Dovina › ay deee 17-Oct-05/6:57 PM Reply

So do I. It's what separates us and gives us that unique, adorable character men cn't resist.

[n/a] ay deee › Dovina 18-Oct-05/6:20 AM Reply

hold on.
what?
what about the words in this poem put a skirt on?

[n/a] ALChemy › Dovina 25-Oct-05/7:59 AM Reply

Yes indeed! Easy access.

[8] zodiac 15-Oct-05/5:53 AM Reply

Can't trust that day.

On a related note, I just watched that movie Elephant last night. Now that's some fucked up shit.

[2] Tintagiles 16-Oct-05/10:42 PM Reply

Yawn yawn yawn.

[n/a] ay deee › Tintagiles 17-Oct-05/8:27 AM Reply

are you sleepy?
can you be specific?
was the first version better?