poemranker ::Rainbow Tears by talking_goldfish

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Rainbow Tears

Member since 2002 · Posted 22 Aug 2002 · Edited 22 Aug 2002 · 8 comments

Tears Drop Upon a dusted cheek, Light Falls To shine upon the rain, The spectrum of light, infesting the land Remains but a spot, 'til the moment arrives, For loss, for sorrow, for rainbows to form And now, tomorrow, can itself be borne, Try Drop Your pain forever more, Night Falls To lose you in yourself, The stars are a-shining, the angels awake And the rain's still a-falling, on the grass that's no greener, But still you must see, the rainbow exists For if not then we, will yesterday miss, Tears Drop To save you from the pain, Light Falls For the rainbow, to be seen.

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8 comments

[n/a] Mephisto 22-Aug-02/2:21 PM Reply
well, i think this is a friggin harsh site, so im like the only person thats nice, or at least i havent met ne others, but i liked this poem, it was good, but there was an exessive use of commas that i think should be attended to
[n/a] talking_goldfish 22-Aug-02/2:24 PM Reply
hey, i'm nice!! well thanx :D but ok, the comma thing.. ya, it's, a, major, prob, of, mine, i, think, i, shud've, taken, english, maybe, i, just, pause, 2, much!!
[n/a] poetandknowit 22-Aug-02/3:33 PM Reply
Don't let anyone tell you this is a good poem. It is not a good poem. It is a bad, bad poem.
[6] Frass 22-Aug-02/4:20 PM Reply
Hang on, there, Stbr and Mphst, I'm nice, too. Just ask PAKI. The poem could use some tweaking.
[2] razorgrin 23-Aug-02/6:08 AM Reply
I say nice things about poems that aren't crap. When they are crap, I say so. This is a bad poem. Really bad.
[n/a] talking_goldfish 23-Aug-02/2:09 PM Reply
regardless of what anyone else thinks this is how it is staying, in its present state, because i like it, enough said.
[4] thepinkbunnyofdoom 18-Apr-03/12:49 PM Reply
K big guy, but the try in "Try
Drop
Your pain forever more,
Night
Falls
To lose you in yourself,"
Is that supposed to tears?
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[n/a] talking_goldfish › thepinkbunnyofdoom 19-Apr-03/4:07 PM Reply
No it is supposed to be try, but thanx :)