poemranker ::Being H.U.M.A.N. by SatanicSuperman

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Free verse № 11259

Being H.U.M.A.N.

Member since 2002 · Posted 25 Aug 2002 · 1 comment

Being Human 6 days..22 hours..and 5 minutes my heart unfolds into a butterfly i'm beautiful, i'm gorgeous, i fly so high, shot down, ripped to shreads, fucked into your world, i need this, i need this coma, my breathe weakens from silence of aroma, gracefulness bleeds the misery, brain spills the ceramic dead, scared, alive, beautiful, wrapped inside your hive, i've never felt so alive, break me down, into your sound, a single wave, how i hate the rave, let the sun reign, feed me your strain, to the left, beside my shame, i find myself, in love, with beauty, filled aroma, fucked into your coma. Jeremy Crawford Dezarn

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[8] J.B. Manning 4-Dec-03/1:58 PM Reply
*breath

Other than that, I like it. The rhym is a little choppy, but I think you could smooth it out pretty easily.