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The bad news is his bones are like rubber

by Venus

Member since 2002 · Posted 27 Jul 2004 · 10 comments

“The good news is nothing is broken,” she says. When I don’t run out of meds it’s easy, you see “C - A - T” Left to my own devices, though you lost me at “C” “The bad news is his bones are like rubber,” she says, with an audible hint of condemnation.

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[8] jessicazee 28-Jul-04/12:06 AM Reply
Intriguing and yessir, I like it. Kind of ambivalent about "you lost me at 'c'" - reminds me of Jerry Maguire unfortunately..."You had me at 'hello'"... Lose the 2 commas, the rest is gravy. 8.
[n/a] Venus › jessicazee 28-Jul-04/7:51 AM Reply
Thanks. Which 2 commas?
[8] jessicazee 28-Jul-04/12:10 AM Reply
Also, I love the title.
[8] wilco 28-Jul-04/10:09 AM Reply
Hmmm, something about this that I like, even though it doesn't make any sense to me.
[n/a] Venus › wilco 28-Jul-04/10:20 AM Reply
I like to get a little feedback before explaining context, just to see if anyone can piece it together as-is. But feeling it is good too, yes?
[7] Dovina 28-Jul-04/11:06 AM Reply
I like enough shrouding to let me draw my own conclisions, but I don't like riddles, and this reads like a riddle.
[n/a] Venus › Dovina 28-Jul-04/11:24 AM Reply
I hear you. But it's no riddle. An "afflicted" woman is hearing some news. She doesn't hear the whole message because her mind is busy trying to justify her potential guilt. Too shrouded perhaps?
[8] Shuushin 29-Jul-04/5:53 PM Reply
Maybe too cryptic. I can see how it might cathartic somehow, but - "what's in it for me?"

"audible hint of condemnation"... what is that, exactly?

Interesting even after my gripes, has a nice cadence - I just want it to mean something without too much trouble (some, is fine).
[n/a] Venus › Shuushin 29-Jul-04/6:11 PM Reply
Yeah, it's clearly missing the WIIFM factor.

The condemnation is coming from the good news/bad news doctor. Why? Because the central character is clearly at fault for the bad news - that his bones are like rubber. Whose bones? Why, the water dragon's bones, of course.

Geez, it's becoming cryptic even to me now!
[7] patty t 29-Jul-04/8:56 PM Reply
cryptic likes a monkey