poemranker ::Penumbra by klosterfobik

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Free verse № 110598

Penumbra

Member since 2004 · Posted 15 Aug 2004 · Edited 24 Aug 2004 · 15 comments

At last you've come, (with something of a subtle grace) O' obscurity that smile on your face, now lacks love. From a distance I hear the sojourn of the wind, it speaks of our end - as if its known all along. This night the stoic moon shares it's lonely glow as if it also knows - this night our joining's severed. And all the stars dim to sorrow, mourning the murder of our love, one falls below from above - a symbol of our parting. And her lips touched mine, but for a moment of bliss, one sweet mortal kiss - then she passed like a clandestine comet.

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[2] Stephen Robins 23-Aug-04/1:32 AM Reply
Why, oh why does poemranker occasionally throw up misanthropes with such stultifying perspicacity as to render the whole website as redundant as a mid-month jam rag?
[n/a] klosterfobik › Stephen Robins 24-Aug-04/2:28 PM Reply
How does this poem imply that I hate people?(or did you forget the definition of misanthrope)?And stultifying perspicacity is a
very milk-fed pedomorphic oxymoron.Why,oh why do Brits still bother to speak - that is redundant - even more so than a mid-month jam rag - you sad little cynic.

[2] Stephen Robins › klosterfobik 26-Aug-04/3:39 AM Reply
I'see your grammar - is coming? on in leaps & bounds. You are a flatulent pederast.
[n/a] klosterfobik › Stephen Robins 27-Aug-04/10:07 PM Reply
Spank you Mr.London!I'll send you a new boy when I can.
[0] horus8 › klosterfobik 14-Sep-04/11:47 PM Reply
It's more like... When did he imply you did? fuckwad.
[9] Dovina 24-Aug-04/5:39 PM Reply
Even the doorknob becomes grief when grief is there. "The stoic moon shares it's lonely glow as if it knows."
[9] Dan garcia-Black 24-Aug-04/7:43 PM Reply
All us stoke victims know all about the Penumbra. -9-
[3] SupremeDreamer 25-Aug-04/7:02 AM Reply
(with something of a subtle grace)
O' obscurity that smile on your face,

Eh? sudden use of fancy ole english, and theres that simplistic rhyming scheme present, sojourn of the wind? stoic moon? murder of our love? oh, and cherry topped with a comet.. Was this supposed to be a pimple?

Sorry. No sale. Chewed & Rejected. Blessed with three.
[n/a] klosterfobik › SupremeDreamer 25-Aug-04/9:08 PM Reply
Thanks anyway.
[n/a] klosterfobik › SupremeDreamer 27-Aug-04/10:10 PM Reply
Would it really matter if it was a pimple?
[4] nentwined 27-Aug-04/2:56 PM Reply
another one for the love/above list!

I like 'clandestine comet'.
[0] Bachus 11-Sep-04/5:37 PM Reply
Cambodian
[0] Shardik 15-Sep-04/11:33 AM Reply
Maryland
[0] <{Baba^Yaga}> 15-Sep-04/2:35 PM Reply
A spoiled wedge of head cheese oddly shaped like Uranus.
[10] deleted user › <{Baba^Yaga}> 17-Sep-04/7:28 PM Reply
You like my anus?