poemranker ::Through Your Frown by Blindpoetry

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Through Your Frown

by Blindpoetry

Member since 2003 · Posted 25 Aug 2004 · 6 comments

Being lonely You want to be someone else Seeing answers You find them in the wrong place Crying out lonely You push tears through your frown Sighing low, low sounds You become a different person Deciding Deciding whether to accomplish Or be blessed with an endless cause Must decide whether to lose or suffer Or be crished with an open heart Physical lieing You find room in popular class Walk, walk, walk You take the open seat they save for you

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6 comments

[n/a] Stephen Robins 26-Aug-04/5:10 AM Reply
No one cares about your poetry, my comment is the first on any of your work for 6 weeks. Do you get the impression that the we are all getting a little tired of your preconscious, childish ramblings?
[n/a] Blindpoetry › Stephen Robins 26-Aug-04/3:25 PM Reply
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I've heard that before...
[n/a] Phalkon › Blindpoetry 27-Aug-04/6:46 AM Reply
hahaha... BURN!

this kicks major booty dude... more than stephen's fat ass
[4] nentwined 26-Aug-04/2:53 PM Reply
the flow/rhythm of this is lacking. the idea--I think I get what you're saying, but it takes inspection. The telling and showing seem to be confused--the telling superfluous, except tha the showing is hard to understand--but even then the telling doesn't help as much as it could. I'd say work more on visualizing what's going on--try to think a little less.
[n/a] Blindpoetry › nentwined 26-Aug-04/3:26 PM Reply
thanks :)
[1] cheese.doodles 15-Mar-07/10:12 AM Reply
No wonder you're lonely, your poetry is ass.