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Life's Vision Altered

Member since 2003 · Posted 11 Oct 2004 · 1 comment

Beautiful big eyes of blues line with black, exquisite features Poet at heart, in soul, a muse Dark writings and drawings of evil creatures Sense of humor matchless laughter quite contagious Smiles completely priceless youth unending and ageless Friends of every type interests all well accounted for ran around all in hype One could not have asked for more Durastic change. Lips utter barely a word Sounds hardly heard at all He thought all spoken was not heard and at this, his only great downfall Glittering eyes now grown dull Laughter silenced by the pain Life no longer enjoyed in full Nothing, he thought, was there to gain. Friends were looked past as if they were not there. His joy just did not last How he thought no body cared. Rope slung high over thickened bough Slipped loosely through knotted line Over the limb his body did he through Surely he did lose his mind. Legs flailed above the ground gurgling coming from deep within the throat from his body the most horrible sounds but the area he's in was completely remote No one heard his final plea as the last breath escaped into the sky My good friend lay limp under the tree. He left me to do nothing, but cry.

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[8] Dovina 12-Oct-04/11:00 AM Reply
Try a spell checker. Some good thoughts here. Suicide is selfish and unkind!