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Perfect Time of Year

by wilco

Member since 2004 · Posted 3 Nov 2004 · 6 comments

The dead leaves falling, Swirling, Fighting over the last bit of uncovered ground. The evening air turning Colder; Perfect if not for lack of a coat. Hopeful for a new beginning. Different, If not for a lack of change.

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[8] edpeterson 3-Nov-04/8:13 PM Reply
why not "leaves fall" and "air turns"?
[n/a] wilco › edpeterson 3-Nov-04/8:33 PM Reply
I don't know really. For some reason I just felt that it sounded better this way.
[8] richa 4-Nov-04/1:22 AM Reply
Sounds nice. 'Different, if not for a lack of change' is a decent idea but wrong poem I think (there is change if dead leaves are falling).
[n/a] zodiac 4-Nov-04/5:38 AM Reply
I'm suspicious of poems which do that repeated-adjective-on-its-own-line thing. Call me screwy.

And I don't like the last two lines at all.
[8] Dovina 4-Nov-04/3:13 PM Reply
Fall IS the perfect time of year in Tennessee, but to say that it is different, if not for lack of change, brings up images of good ol' boys, a holler an' 'shine.
[n/a] wilco › Dovina 4-Nov-04/4:35 PM Reply
The different line is actually partially about fall and partially about a certain event that happened on Tuesday...;)