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I am the deer caught off guard by my own complacent
headlights, forgetting momentum and staring at this
eight percent upgrade. Forgive me if I burp the brakes
backpedal and drop two, three, four gears. This road
is not on any map. It is something to negotiate my
bulky conveyance through these too tight corners with
my limited sight distance and reminders flashing like
brake-lights in the mirrors. Puritans scowl
as I pass their tidy little boxes, the fingering
trees flicking my antennae. It has been too long away
from this discomfort ,my mind cramps wondering if this
is just a slow road to another slow road and my eyes
fix on a (bug) crashing onto my bonnet as the temp-
orary hood ornament quickly rights itself and flies
away as I snatch the wheel back from the edge , over
correct, correct , splitting hairs, gears, my hands
blistering from the constant friction. I know that
eventually the trees will open to a straighter road in an
open meadow and a small toll bridge waiting. My eyes
will scale the next hill, I'll sigh, and remember to
keep my foot in it.
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The "deer" analogy starts off well, and I wish you'd drove in on through. But when the road is not on the map and then gets wordily into "It is something to negotiate, well, I says, "deer have pretty good sense." And is "my" really needed that often? I'm no Gimmy-driver, but I'm trying to visualize brake lights in mirrors. "Trees flicking my antenna" is deer-like and descriptive though. "Splitting hairs and splitting gears" is good. Consider the deer, don't be queer. Yeah, I'm doin' no better.
- Theodor Adorno
Well, this has been fun... *whistles chuffily*
headlights' is fine. I don't think it is meant to be an image so much as a reference to and modification of a cliche.
fingering
trees flicking my antennae.
Always something you do which adds beef to my own creative juices :-)
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