poemranker ::Guinness by Dovina

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Free verse № 116042

Guinness

Member since 2004 · Posted 24 Nov 2004 · 8 comments

  His friends walk out at midnight from Dargan’s Pub and Ale House. He thinks about driving home, then orders another brew.   “I’m a good guy with a few habits,” he says, and slapping his Guinness on the bar, “I work hard and like a good time.”   As we share a final beer, he refuses to blame a woman, does not even accuse the help. What a good sport he is. I give him style points for honesty.   He’s a good man to talk to, goes down like a pina colada, smooth and sweet.

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8 comments

[5] celticskatermatt1 25-Nov-04/4:57 PM Reply
what a gay poem
[n/a] Dovina › celticskatermatt1 25-Nov-04/9:40 PM Reply
Only if you decide to interpret it that way.
[9] Dan garcia-Black 25-Nov-04/5:37 PM Reply
This sounds like an accurately kept transcript of the night. The last stanza could be the first and nothing would be lost.
[n/a] Dovina › Dan garcia-Black 25-Nov-04/9:44 PM Reply
I omitted a few items from the transcript.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 25-Nov-04/6:23 PM Reply
Do any of your poemes rhyme? I just tried going through the rigmarole of checking each one to see, but only got through the first three before thinking "Sod this, I'll just ask her if any of them rhyme". Well? Do they? Nearly all my poemes rhyme.
[n/a] Dovina › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 25-Nov-04/9:53 PM Reply
Yes, in "Solitude" I rhymed foe with abode whch stands to this day as one of poemranker's finest and most unusual iambic vowel chimes.
[10] blacksoul 28-Nov-04/4:11 AM Reply
Sounds like a man i know who worked for thirty years and raised five children.
[n/a] Dovina › blacksoul 28-Nov-04/9:19 AM Reply
I pity his wife and would like to be one of his friends at the pub.