Free verse № 119388
Save our Self(revised to be a trek into the vent tent)
There is a function for this thing I have
it cannot be, but only wills
Pushing itself into itself, it denies
instrumental in design, benign and blind
A bullet for building
The preachers prey in paradise,causing
young children to run from this sight
Further into sweet delight
Deeper into endless night
Driven
Dying
But never, EVER<EVER crying
death before honesty
Denial
Entrenched in the wretched waste of a four year hangover
we have never been glad to be spiritually sober
Hangers on are falling in, into the sacred hotel of sin
singing,hoping for revelations
finding hell in satiation
pointing sacramental scented icons
"dashing dapper gents and Don Juans"
"Not enough your smiling ways"
"You must leave, but your soul will stay"
They found my sacred heart smelly and repugnant
but they recycle, so they exclaimed "fuggit"
"We can make 3.50, and buy a couple charcoal filtered"
"Look at the design on this chumps soul we pilfered"
"I think it's some reference to a triumph of the masses"
Like Johnny football painter, and those oracles he passes
It's radiating something, maybe mismanaged mutual worship
"I think he's living in it, it's best if we just torch it"
17 comments
You got some nerve lady. Shaken not stirred.
Clear enough.
Yo. I'm a skeptic.
It did. I'm sorry for the limp lashing I did this a.m. I doubt it phased you, and yet it was unbecoming.
I've got things. Not your problem though.
I enjoy your work, and I guess thats why it was petty to be as insulting as I was. I got defensive.
Apologies.
Also, where did you find that high horse? It seems you can only spit worthless slander. You haven't posted up, but you still whip out the old drowsy one liners.
Make something. Then come back with malice.
In any case I appreciate the comment.
Mark
I've now completely eliminated all traces of the O.G. S.o.S.
due to my own distaste for it. It was about despair,obvious, maybe, but I'm in some straits right now. I feel bound to this dilemma, but crippled, without any options except blind denial.
This vent tent revision is a return to a sort of stream of thought structure, which is very loose and sometimes confusing, but not contrived. I find this process can help me create something temporary but stable(like a tent),and it's rather therapeutic.
I'm not seeking kudos here, or trying to contend with the prophets, but life's frustrations need an apparatus. I'm drawing with words. I'm a visual artist by blood, and a non practicing catholic in recovery, as well as an admirer of poets.
You write with an honest tone in your comment, thats so rare, Thankyou.
Mark
I revised that crappiness. I'm completely ready for all negative stabs and jabs. Bring the pain.
Was 'There Is Life On Uranus"
AKA 'The Humped Meat Loaf's, MMM-GOOOOOD"
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