poemranker ::Confusion by jroday

DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

Free verse № 119801

Confusion

Member since 2004 · Posted 8 Feb 2005 · 2 comments

Confusion is an emotion that gets the best of us all. Try hard to maintain a postive stand, only to welcome negativity then fall. Who claims to know the end of a story only half told. One unique person with a heart of gold. Sometimes the power, it comes from the mind. How can you lay stake to it on another man's grind? Give me up! let loose my chains. Lay down a path leading to faulty grain. Challenge all the creatures, and stand face to face with the baddest beast. Demand they consume my hands...north, south,west and east. Take out a broken bow in the company of a bent up arrow; target locked on an invisible sparrow. I can't hear you and it,s making me weak. Dictate unconscious words as I speak. Showers of vocies makes the confusion grow. How much mental land is left to till before that first pure snow? Flowers blossom and glories they eventually bloom. Night after night passes, but morning comes to soon. Creates a vision of dancing daisies. Erects a slupture from the brains of the lazy. Nothing stops in confusion's world. It's on a signed mission from it's creator to destroy man, woman, boy and girl.

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 6.50 weighted 5.18 rank 4906 views 206 View voting details →

4 votes so far. Yours would make 5.4 votes so far

2 comments

[7] Dovina 8-Feb-05/7:16 AM Reply
Verse 4 is the way a lot of conversations go. Good description. There's no point in even talking when it goes like that.

"Erects a sculpture from the brains of the lazy" is good too,
[9] al-naafiysh 8-Feb-05/4:37 PM Reply
I agree with Dovina on verse 4 since joining P.R., and reading some of the comments Mr.jroday you hit the hammer on the nail.