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Sonnet № 120143

Bleed ,Rip and Tear

by NoSage

Member since 2003 · Posted 14 Feb 2005 · 4 comments

In senseless agony We let small wounds bind Our hearts and our minds. Don't just struggle with the bonds Bleed, rip and tear At the fabric that you wear, Don't cloak yourself with ignorance... EXPAND. What Is mediocre? An excuse to your friends? Would it stand up in the end? Really, Would God just say; "Well Jason, You were quite lukewarm in your faith today, But I will grant you entrance anyway".

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[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 15-Feb-05/2:06 AM Reply
In Gethsemane, Jesu asked of the Lord (Matthew 26: 39) "My Father, if it is possible, may this cup be taken from me. Yet not as I will, but as you will." Clearly Jesu thought, on the off chance, that the Lord (who was also Jesu) may have known of a different, less grotesque method of cleansing us of our sins, and was only sending Jesu to His death more or less on a whim. Alas this was not so, but does it not portray the Bearded Carpenter during a momentary lapse into lukewarmedness? Good Christ I hope not.
[7] Dovina 15-Feb-05/3:42 PM Reply
Please don't call this a sonnet. Thank you, I feel better now.

The first half is a nice little sermon on using small hurts to our advantage. Some will say that all preaching in poetry is bad. "Show, don't tell," they chant endlessly. But I like your little sermon. Then you get weird with the lukewarm thing, as if you might be bringing Scripture into it. And when God talks, well, it seems like a another way of saying to use hurts to our advantage.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Dovina 15-Feb-05/3:57 PM Reply
I don't think that's what they mean by "Show don't tell," not that I have ever condoned that most overused of comment templates. I've always thought it basically meant "use imagery." You can write a poeme that both SHOWS and PREACHES. I imagine it would look something like a parable with line breaks :(
[7] Dovina › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 15-Feb-05/4:06 PM Reply
Imagery is certainly an element of the Sacred Showing. While this sermon uses some imagery, it's basically telling us how to act, and I like it that way.