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A Sinner’s Prayer

by Dovina

Member since 2004 · Posted 16 Feb 2005 · 10 comments

O Thou who made with pitfalls The world I wander in Would surely not Impute my fall to sin Or require sorrowful contrition For mistakes made so enticing. No loving God would sit so smug, Take pleasure in my groveling. I conclude it must be in Your will Not to hear my sorrowful calls But to watch a learner navigate Pitfalls with a few less falls

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[8] INTRANSIT 16-Feb-05/2:59 PM Reply
Howdy, D. Nice beat here. A serious answer to your question of why I left: I think my poetry sucks. No kidding. I'm just not measuring up to what I expect of myself. And now back to our regularly scheduled silliness:

I left because, in high school, I didn't get the safety program that went:

Bill got mixed up with the wrong internet crowd.
He wants to try poetry.

Careful, Bill, it's difficult.

No, Bill, you can't spondee! You'll hurt yourself!

Too bad for Bill.

No, I get the one: Bill wants to try Rachmaninoff.
Ok. I didn't get that one, but I did get the one that goes:

Bill wants to try Air-traffic-control.

Well, you can see where that led to.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › INTRANSIT 16-Feb-05/3:53 PM Reply
Don't give up the fight! As a very young child, I was unable to wipe my bum. Grown ups had to do it for me. But I kept at it, and one day I managed to do it all on my own, with only a 15% residue! Knowing you're plastered in shit is the first step on the road to becoming less plastered in shit. And you never know: maybe in a year or two you'll be able to wipe your own bum just like me! Now that's a cause worth fighting for if ever I saw one.
[n/a] Dovina › INTRANSIT 17-Feb-05/7:48 AM Reply
Oh, so you're caught in a great circular eddy from which there is no escape. Welcome back for another spin.
[n/a] horus8 16-Feb-05/3:37 PM Reply
If you grovel for me, I'll tell you where god lives.
So that you might send him a more refined query.
[n/a] Dovina › horus8 16-Feb-05/8:58 PM Reply
Oh, would you please, grovel, grovel, grovel.
[10] zodiac 17-Feb-05/4:24 AM Reply
Q: Do you think God reads your poems?

Q2: Do you think God pays more attention to your poems than he does to, say, the Sri Lankan praying 'O God please whatever you do don't send a tidal wave anytime soon, see I just bought this new car and it's a Hyundai with leather interior standard etc etc etc'?

Q3: You're a Christian. I know this isn't a question. If you just admitted you were a Christian, you'd be happier maybe, but probably not.

Q4: Dear me, your 8 months on poemranker have put you on the side of
- preaching
- didacticism
- illogics forcibly repeated in the face of uncomfortable reason
- telling not showing
- flagrant cronyism
- affirmative action
- racists
- misspelling
- more illogic
- and God.

Are you George W. Bush?
[n/a] Dovina › zodiac 17-Feb-05/7:44 AM Reply
Q1 I don't know, but of course you do.
Q2 I don't know, but of course you do.
Assertions 3 and 4: I don't know, but of course you do.
Q5 No
[10] zodiac › Dovina 18-Feb-05/10:16 PM Reply
Q1: Of course I know. He does, but doesn't much care, being proven (by Saint Augustine, natch) to prefer rhyming poems.

Q2: Ibid. So stop acting like you're writing poems for God's consideration only. And then stop making so many fucking errors of judgment and logic and then when we point them out saying, fuck you God understands and he's the only one I'm worried about so there. Just stop. Stop, please.

Q3: Take my word for it. You are.

There is no question 5. Your question 5 is the question of question 4. The answer is of course you aren't, George Bush being proven to like rhyming poems about cowboys, but you might want to consider backing off your Bushian neoconservative irrationalist stance (which I'm convinced you've had to take simply out of some bent drive to contradict us at whatever cost). If there isn't already a law against you in California, there probably will be soon.
[10] jroday 17-Feb-05/3:31 PM Reply
Hey! is it Ok for a brother to leave a comment?
I don't wanna leave no icing (smile)
[n/a] Dovina › jroday 17-Feb-05/4:29 PM Reply
Comment away, brother.