poemranker ::Lets recreate hell real properly by Crakyamuni

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Free verse № 120310

Lets recreate hell real properly

Member since 2002 · Posted 17 Feb 2005 · 2 comments

A ghost I am, essentially chasing, hunting myself, here and not here "We are" as a complex Dead before I was born Alive before I died Laugh at my mayhem, It's funny like saturday morning cartoons It might sooth your bloodlust My emptiness rejoice at this for knowing is sorrow Borrow these mishaps and reshape your maintainence for we all have the wisdom to know the difference but never the power to achieve the mean.

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[7] wilco 17-Feb-05/5:47 PM Reply
I like the last three lines and the part about the ghost. the part in the middle you might could work on though.
[n/a] Crakyamuni › wilco 17-Feb-05/6:11 PM Reply
I think your right. The middle is contrived. thanks.