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A Nation

Member since 2005 · Posted 8 Mar 2005 · Edited 8 Mar 2005 · 15 comments

I used to think communism was evil but that was back when McCarthy was just a name red went with blue and white and I desperatley wanted to be Chinese so I could have straight silky hair I think I know more now I think that I know that communism is a dream that is good I think that I know that Mao wasn't true to Marxism and that Stalin was just a paranoid looney but we also thought that we knew that we were safe in America and that we would never suffer because of Hiroshima we thought that nuclear weapons were fun and amazing but thats what the Greeks thought of Vesuvius when I close my eyes and look into the future it's not hard to imagine the entire world frozen still by one large mushroom cloud over the sky far more terrifying than any volcanoe Einstein was right the second time but he was also outspoken and lonely are we willing to risk that I'm not I don't want to die hungry for life I want to live the American dream without feeling guilty I want to find my ancestors in the stars America is coming undone, she's unraveling in this rootless nation no one has any anchors; we're just clinging onto whatever we find no wonder so many drown Arogant and Ignorant, there's land up ahead but we'd rather be drifters than a third world nation

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[8] Rainbow_chaser 8-Mar-05/8:46 PM Reply

i love a good eye opening poem. good job, im not american, blessed be.
but as a human i agree.

[n/a] the_poetess › Rainbow_chaser 9-Mar-05/3:01 PM Reply

thankyou
what country do you come from
just wondering
if you dont want to say that is fine

and i do love america but i hate it to, is that strange or uniquely american (most of my friends agree)

-emili

[8] Rainbow_chaser › the_poetess 9-Mar-05/3:41 PM Reply

I'm a Canadian. And of course i dont mind saying.
Its not that i have anything against america per-say,
perhaps its just the goverment i have a serious issue with.
I dont find it strange to love yet hate your country,
i honestly do love my own, but then we have it much easier over here.
~Autumn

[n/a] the_poetess › Rainbow_chaser 9-Mar-05/4:18 PM Reply

i am having issues with our government as well..
canada, huh, i actually have family there, but i've never met them

you have such a pretty name, just saying
-emili

[7] thepinkbunnyofdoom 8-Mar-05/9:58 PM Reply

lol, America coming undone? I like how you started this, but it was too long and detailed and I believe you lost your own point along the way. -7- Because there was some thought and attempts at being poetic here, but mainly because you did some of your homework. But mostly this comes off as the rantings of someone who thinks they understand whats going on in life, but in all actually doesn't.

[n/a] the_poetess › thepinkbunnyofdoom 9-Mar-05/2:59 PM Reply

you know, you are probably very near the mark when you say that......i do have a habit of going to long and getting too detailed......but i think my point may be just an aim in the dark at the truth because thats all i was looking for when i rote this.......and you are correct again when you that i dont understand life............i havent lived nearly enough of it yet to have any real idea what im talking about, but i try and hope that when and if i ever do understand i will know enough to be able to share that with others.............

-emili

[0] <{Baba^Yaga}> 9-Mar-05/1:22 PM Reply

You can't even spell "arogant" right you shittle.
But don't worry, communists love to milk the slower herdlings.

[n/a] the_poetess › <{Baba^Yaga}> 9-Mar-05/2:57 PM Reply

you know i really fail to see the relevance between spelling and what expletives may be applied to me

and you dont really know what your talking about which is sad because at the heart of communism is one of the best ideas ever come up with, mainly, that each person does what they can and gets what the need

the problem is that as a human race, we are not pious, satisfied, or driven to do work when we dont have, myself and yourself included

please think before you sound ignorant, i am sure you are not or you wouldnt be pursuing a poetry site anyway

-emili

[0] <{Baba^Yaga}> › the_poetess 9-Mar-05/3:54 PM Reply

Of course you don't, otherwise you'd learn how to spell? Do you always come off as a pair of unworn chaps, or is that just your idea of a poetic haircut? See the problem with communism is simple, I don't like peasants, so why in the fuck should I support their lack of creativity, or individuality? I'd rather be a seperatist, or a fascist, and let them starve.

[6] nentwined 9-Mar-05/3:03 PM Reply

Definitely one of your better posts; I'd cut it after "Vesuvius". I think it would be rather good if you cut it after "Vesuvius", actually. :)

[n/a] the_poetess › nentwined 9-Mar-05/3:04 PM Reply

intersting.........do you think the end could stand on its own as its own poem,(the last three verses) or would you say that the first part is the only good part
-emili

[6] nentwined › the_poetess 9-Mar-05/3:18 PM Reply

The first part is a more interesting approach; the last bit is both preachier and more generic.

The first part is simple, but that works well for it; large ideas are often better told from a childlike point of view. :)

[n/a] the_poetess › nentwined 9-Mar-05/4:19 PM Reply

you make a good point, and i will keep that in mind
thankyou for being able to criticize without being rude or negative.......
-emili

[6] nentwined › the_poetess 9-Mar-05/4:23 PM Reply

Nearly a decade of active practice on that, and I still hit the wrong tone sometimes. :)

Often on the ranker it's hard to tell whether someone's just taking a piss and waiting for you to try to take them too seriously.

[n/a] the_poetess › nentwined 2-Apr-05/12:10 PM Reply

compltely agreed