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Camping, Volume 3

Member since 2002 · Posted 18 Mar 2005 · 4 comments

Death should be quick, a campfired moth, disappearing wings, a notable noise. Ash light, flying then dying toward the canopy of knowing trees. Above furtive flames, the space holes of meteor showers live in deep dark. The stars drip all night long, blackberry bushes whisper secret nicknames, brambles before fruit.

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[8] Dovina 18-Mar-05/1:53 PM Reply
I've liked your camping missives. I have memories like them. How about "unknowing trees" and "blackberry briars whisper sharp stings before sweet fruit" and "ember light"
[n/a] jessicazee › Dovina 23-Mar-05/12:10 AM Reply
Good ideas. I'll try them.
[10] zodiac 18-Mar-05/10:05 PM Reply
This is really very good.
[n/a] jessicazee › zodiac 23-Mar-05/12:12 AM Reply
zodiac- thanks. I've admired your work here, so your compliment means lots. *warm feeling though cold, slipperless feet*