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JUST A FEW

Member since 2005 · Posted 8 Jul 2005 · 9 comments

I REALLY DIDN'T KNOW AT ALL OR HAVE THE SLIGHTEST CLUE EXACTLY WHAT YOU MEANT TO ME I ONLY HOPE YOU KNEW THAT SO MUCH, I DID LOVE YOU MUM AND SO MUCH,I DID CARE AND NOW MY LIFE WITHOUT YOU HERE IS JUST TOO HARD TO BARE I CAN'T BELIEVE YOUR TIME HAS COME THAT GOD HAS CALLED YOUR NAME I'M DEVESTATED,SO ALONE MY LIFE WON'T BE THE SAME I DON'T WAKE UP AND SMILE NO MORE INSTEAD ALL THAT I FEEL IS LONELINESS,AN EMPTY HEART THAT I KNOW TIME WON'T HEAL BECAUSE THERE COULD NOT EVER BE SOMEBODY JUST LIKE YOU WHO MAKES ME FEEL SO GOOD INSIDE AND LOVED THE WAY YOU DO I CAN'T ACCEPT IT,THAT YOU'VE GONE I WON'T ACCEPT IT'S REAL BECAUSE THIS CAN'T BE FAIR, OR RIGHT TO CAUSE MY HEART TO FEEL AS THOUGH IT'S JUST BEEN TORN APART CLEAN BROKEN UP IN TWO BECAUSE HE'S TAKEN FROM MY LIFE THE ONLY MUM I KNEW.

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[5] Dovina 8-Jul-05/9:05 PM Reply

I thought I knew who MUM was until the end. Weird.

[n/a] rbooey › Dovina 9-Jul-05/4:14 AM Reply

it dosn't take much to lose you ,does it.

[5] Dovina › rbooey 9-Jul-05/10:55 AM Reply

Not when you say what you don't mean and write everything in big letters as if it's more important that way. Mum has to be a name for your mother, and after rambling repeatatively, using three times as many words as needed, about how you miss her, then in the last line you say about your mother, "He's taken from my life. Geeeeees!

[n/a] rbooey › Dovina 9-Jul-05/11:23 AM Reply

how petty do you want to be,who cares if the letters are big or small ,you're probably the only one who has noticed,you nasty,nitpicking little shit.

[0] Bluemonkey › rbooey 11-Jul-05/6:28 AM Reply

Actually, i noticed too...and to be honest with you, it's quite annoying.

[n/a] ALChemy 9-Jul-05/8:27 AM Reply

I could give my opinion but the only opinion that matters about this poem is your MUM's. And if somewhere out there she say's it's GREAT then who the hell am I to argue.

[0] Bluemonkey 11-Jul-05/11:37 AM Reply

Please refer to my reply to your comment on the suggestions page for my reason for giving this a 0.

[1] nentwined 15-Feb-07/7:05 PM Reply

ouch.

[1] nentwined 15-Feb-07/7:05 PM Reply

If you actually mean any of this, know that it is a very poor tribute. Which is not to be ashamed of--probably most tributes are poor. But if you do actually mean any of it, consider trying to improve it--or just move on.