poemranker ::Moving Up by jessicazee

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Free verse № 128627

Moving Up

Member since 2002 · Posted 13 Jul 2005 · 3 comments

My mom was a secretary: nylons, travel plans, no Windows, pencils to sharpen, hairspray, the coffee - weak. At home her lists were in shorthand, curlicues behind numbers, more cigarettes, a Christmas list. Dictaphones on folder files losing to tape recorders, mimeographs siring copy machines, a hold button, shorter skirts, short haircuts, her own parking spot. A computer in color, typewriters to dust, look at the fax machine! Sunlight grew African violets in an office with a door. In rolling leather chairs, meetings and numbers okayed, a noble new title. Earning and getting, a notice, a thank you. A mug of her own, a soft pair of shoes.

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[9] http://bandgeek 15-Jul-05/8:01 PM Reply
nice collage of details
[n/a] <~> 20-Jul-05/7:46 AM Reply
not sure if the promotion is to her position at home, or if she's been promoted at work. other than that, i like what you've done. but that one part could be clearer.
[9] INTRANSIT › <~> 25-Jul-05/4:40 PM Reply
That ambiguity works for me.