poemranker ::Moving Out by jessicazee

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Free verse № 130840

Moving Out

Member since 2002 · Posted 9 Sep 2005 · 3 comments

I’m tired of flies, silverfish and smells, stains, crumbs, balls of hair. A tub that never drains, my old T-shirts are dirty rags. I hardly go barefoot anymore. Do pillows need washing? My hands aren’t paper towels. We had feather dusters, two vacuums, a spray can that worked, those days together at the Laundromat next to the Y-Not III folding sheets and blankets with four hands are good-byes, things I broke or spilled when you would clean up the mess.

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3 comments

[7] Dovina 10-Sep-05/5:12 AM Reply
"a tub" in line 3, then a . at the end, or otherwise fix the grammar. Seems like the last 2 lines should move up.
[7] hendrimike 10-Sep-05/2:34 PM Reply
reminds me of college
[8] ALChemy 11-Sep-05/7:21 PM Reply
I'll give you an 8 because you can spell vacuum which is more than at least two other poets can do.