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Lyric № 131951

Adelaide

by wilco

Member since 2004 · Posted 11 Oct 2005 · 6 comments

I’m so tired of pretending that everything’s okay. Maybe I could sleep through Christmas again this year and wake up on New Years Day. It’s all coming down now that everything’s okay. Sometimes I go to sleep in the snow with the hope that I’ll wake up warm and safe. Adelaide, I’m coming home and it’s been so long since I’ve said a prayer that I hope you can forgive what I’ve done. Adelaide, I’ve got a bullet in my head and my knees are weak. I’ve taken everything I love with a grain of salt and spread it all through my wounds. I’m so tired of waking up and thinking I’m okay. Maybe I could be better if I slept through another South Pacific dream. Safely coming down now and everything’s okay. I woke up in the snow again with nothing left to hold me in place. Adelaide, I’m coming home and it’s been so long since I’ve said a prayer that I hope you can forgive what I’ve done. Adelaide, I’ve got a picture in my head and my will is weak. I’ve taken everything she loved with an endless weight that’s moved my wounds to scar.

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[9] INTRANSIT 12-Oct-05/6:12 AM Reply
"grain of salt and spread it through my wounds" that's the stuff !
[n/a] ALChemy 12-Oct-05/2:55 PM Reply
It's kind of in limbo. Either focus more on the love story or the war story. The writing style comes off as sincere and that's a real good thing. Try to avoid rhyming th first verse and then not rhyming the others.
[n/a] wilco › ALChemy 13-Oct-05/12:44 PM Reply
I don't think you're interpreting it as I meant it..but that's a good thing if there's different interpretations.
[n/a] ALChemy › wilco 13-Oct-05/3:46 PM Reply
It still comes off as love between you and something (city or woman or whatever) and the bullet wounds and other more subtle things imply war even if it's some kind of metaphor. You humanized a city but left pretty much no clue to us geographically challenged that it was a city you were talking to.
Unless different interpretations is what your going for it's not necessarily a good thing.
I still like its melodic qualities.
[7] Dovina 12-Oct-05/5:30 PM Reply
Lyrics are so hard to understand without the music. I'd say lose the "up" in line 5, but maybe some twang of string requires it. And Adelaide is such an old-time name that I'd expect a song about her to follow the old-time patterns. Oh well, maybe I just don't get it.
[n/a] wilco › Dovina 13-Oct-05/12:43 PM Reply
It's a city in Australia.