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From Dust To Flesh To Texas

Member since 2002 · Posted 23 Sep 2005 · 6 comments

Safe within the ultra-scan I was barely visible Asleep in a manger Until Herod killed me With ten latex swords. After I was born I was barely visible Sour breasts from a sweet Mother Who sang of a Mocking Bird That never came. When I was twelve my Dad showed me Jesus but I saw a carpenter dying on a cross he carved? So I could be forgiven For pending sins. When I was twelve My God was born in Texas She weighed two pounds four ounces And crucified my devils By the time I was thirty. Some babies are born old They have lived a hundred lives Searching to be found And dying lost For they were alive to be dead again. I have loved her always From dust to flesh to Texas And now I have a home in her The door is locked But I am visible.

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[9] deleted user 23-Sep-05/11:45 AM Reply
All I can say is -- OUTSTANDING. Very powerful,k moving examination of the ambiguities, contradictions, and agonies in life. You have a wonderful gift; I hope you will continue to write.
[8] Dovina 23-Sep-05/2:10 PM Reply
Very good until the last two verses. Then you seem to shift into another gear. It's like two poems.
[n/a] Caducus › Dovina 24-Sep-05/4:11 AM Reply
I agree but then this is a personal one unlike most of mine which are not.

My love life is a bit wonky and I'm not a great poet just honest and fucked up.

Thank you for reading.
[8] Tintagiles 23-Sep-05/4:04 PM Reply
Nice, nice. Why the question mark at 'cross he carved'? The second last stanza doesn't seem to fit that well, though.
[n/a] Caducus › Tintagiles 24-Sep-05/4:08 AM Reply
No proof of it I guess. Thanks for commenting
[n/a] ALChemy 25-Sep-05/9:46 AM Reply
Drop the next to last line. It's out of place and seems preachy. Otherwise real good.

She was 18 when you were 30?!


You old dog you;)