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Free verse № 141839

Explorations Underground

by ecargo

Member since 2002 · Posted 3 Apr 2006 · 10 comments

How you look to me: Saluki lean, scrawled sapphire, a warrior in woad crawling ahead through this caustic barrow. Lichen tawny, the light seems strained, spreading oddly from the ovate wellhead beneath the deadfall, a hole through the ancient moraine, where this hollow hour holds the liquid, thumping backbeat of some river’s end.

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[9] ALChemy 3-Apr-06/2:11 PM Reply
Amon?

Did you know color was very symbolic to Ancient Egyptians. Here, I found you a link:
http://www.egyptianmyths.net/colors.htm
[n/a] ecargo › ALChemy 3-Apr-06/2:18 PM Reply
I didn't know--cool link. Thanks.

Not Amon exactly, but I think Saluki was headed that way. Woad, though--well, I'm not sure. You'd think I'd know. ;)
[9] ALChemy › ecargo 3-Apr-06/2:41 PM Reply
I didn't really take "woad" literally anyway. Maybe "azure", "cerulean" or "Royal blue" or even just "a royal warrior".
[10] INTRANSIT 3-Apr-06/2:19 PM Reply
Woad? Yes! It's twoo! It's twoo! If you changed the color and the setting,(not that you would, and barrow to borough, You get another poem. I love the saluki lean. remember Christof?
[n/a] ecargo › INTRANSIT 3-Apr-06/2:21 PM Reply
I do remember Christof (that nice sculpture poem), but what does he have to do with Salukis? Or woad?

[10] INTRANSIT › ecargo 3-Apr-06/2:24 PM Reply
The cadence is what reminded me, I guess.
[9] ALChemy › INTRANSIT 3-Apr-06/2:27 PM Reply
Or even "burrowed in the barrow".
[9] Caducus 4-Apr-06/8:37 AM Reply
last 3 lines wrap it up a treat.
[9] MacFrantic 4-Apr-06/11:40 PM Reply
I love the last line, money. *9*
[9] Ranger 6-Apr-06/8:16 AM Reply
'Lichen tawny' is possibly the finest descriptive pairing I've ever seen.